Dear Lucifer

 

 

 

 

 

I am well

 

"thank you"

 

 

You asked about the storm

All I can say is

 

 

Yes

 

 

 it still thunders...

 

 

I truly believe that when lightning strikes

it always strikes in the same place twice

There has been no rain

 

 

"to stop the fire"

Therefore

 

 

My make-believe Eden burned to the ground

 

The energy of you

 

 

 

"I still feel"

 

 

 

 when nobody's around

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Dean Kuch®]

No rain to stop the raging inferno, yet, I rein. No thunder to chisel away at the sounds of screaming, but I scream thunderously. No relief from the pain...the misery. Yet, pain & misery are my relief.

This was something else, Muse! Ethereal, sublimely creepy...this was VERY good!

The overall presentation was astounding!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Wow, that is all. That is all.

[Kourtney G]

This interesting. Simple yet very well done. I do like it very much.

[lee von cleef]

Stepped into the woods....
Waited...
I could feel the weight of the thing....
A wave static prickly skin side up cool shiver ....

Then a warm hollow filled the canyon....
and bright shut my eyes tight......
Crack !
Booming from rim to rim....

Silence again but for one lowly crinkled juniper ..

The mark of God in Lucifer's world,

Welcome Home Muse.......

[Relic]

This is a powerful poem you've penned. I like the formatting and font too. Great work from you muse.

[Muse]

Long time no see...

:)))

[Relic]

I thought about you though. :)

[Blue Ivory]

Wow, this is so amazing. I haven't felt the message of a poem like this in a while. This is really powerful. I've missed reading your work.

[Androglossia]

This is really an interesting piece, I've been reading this over and over for many days now and only one scene comes to mind like a movie clip:

Pale woman by the tower window looking over a stormy city. Then lighting strikes and gone.

[Muse]

like I told Frieda...I wrote this in less than two minutes. My inspiration did strike quickly...much like lightning. Only now am I beginning to understand my own words better.

[VennelaMargame]

It's true that "Lucifer" means "bearer of light" and Lucifer was the name of a brand of matches made during the 19th Century. No wonder the garden is burning!

While I'm talking about obscure allusions, have you ever read "The Storm" by Kate Chopin? Because the reference to a storm here reminded me of that, and its tale of an unsatisfied woman having an incendiary encounter with an old lover. But maybe I'm just reading way too much into this.

The lines in quotations make me wonder if they're being spoken aloud and the rest is just subtext.

[Muse]

one of my favorite reviews thus far..thank you

[VennelaMargame]

I'm glad I wasn't just spouting nonsense.

[Lydia Shutter]

A write of empowerment here. Dreams can be wiped out by bad times in life, but if we are strong....both emotionally and physically....we can move onward and upward. A thought provoker for sure. Lydi**

[Muse]

Thank you Lydia...

[emmajoy]

Perhaps you, we, need to feel that power in order to understand what it can do, whether once, twice, whatever? Your writing's more than .. it harnesses thoughts, tries to control them but, same time, take us somewhere unknown where examples are given and lessons learned. And, maybe, to join you? We believe what we have is enough but it only needs a nudge and then, all hell breaks out - or can: ' My make-believe Eden burned to the ground.. '

[Muse]

Hello Emma...missed ya...so good to see your pure heart in my darker part of the world. I might need your light and beauty for future inspiration...would you be willing? ;)

[emmajoy]

Have my first aid kit at the ready! :)

[Flowrite]

This is thought provoking in so many ways. The thought that the devil is interested in your stamina to weather the storm, while burning your Eden to the ground. That his presence is still felt in your dream. But is nobody around because of his presence or the thunder. I like this piece, because you take me on a journey and then it loops around. And where are you during the reader’s travel: in make-believe Eden assessing your debris or alone inside a shelter from the storm? Definitely, felt the beginning of a movie trailer. True Slow Burn.

[Muse]

I love your insight...of course he wants our stamina. He is like a blood-sucking leach, feeding off our fears and dark energy. Your perspective makes me want to get lost in my own thoughts again... thank you. I almost wonder if this is just a start to another series of poems I am beginning to feel a real need to pen.

[Flowrite]

Absolutely, I feel that it is a series because the darkness is endless and the light you bring to it from your pen gives it life, so that others may know and recognize him and their fears based on him.

[Muse]

Welcome to the café Flowrite, I hope to be reading more of you.