World on fire...

            

 

 

 

 

 

 

                                

          no

 

 

 

 

 

                                

         no one can save me

 

 

 

 

 

         no

 

 

                

                        no one can save me

 

 

                                                

no one can save me but you

 

 

 

                    my world was on fire

 

 

 

            what a wicked desire

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

                                 An ocean made of sapphire

 

 

 

                  my heart is breaking for you

 

 

 

                                   our secret Eden caught fire

 

 

                                                

 

                           no one can save me but you

            

 

 

                                    

    I was treading an empire

 

 

 

                    dreaming and believing in you

 

 

 

                                our dance felt like barbwire

 

 

 

            lost in the wavelength of you

 

 

 

                                    A mirage made of hellfire

 

 

 

                             looking and searching for you

 

 

 

                                    might our energy expire

 

 

    

                loathing and hoping for you

 

 

 

What an oppressive attire

 

 

 

        drowning and swimming in you

 

 

 

    your resentment I admired

 

 

 

burning and dying in you

 

 

 

        No one can save me

 

 

                

                  no

 

 

 

 

                  no one can save me

 

 

 

 

                             no

 

 

                                                

no one can save me

 

 

                                                

              no one can save me

 

 

 

 

   no one can save me but you

 

 

 

                    my world was on fire

 

 

 

            what a wicked desire

 

 

 

 

I never dreamed

 

 

 

         I'd meet somebody like you

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

                              

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

  

Author's Note

This time I could say I was truly inspired by both music and imagery. I wanted to see if I could spin off my own poem based on a famous song and some well-known lyrics. The reverberation of her voice made me feel like I was in a canyon surrounded by beautiful echoes...I tried to share this emotion the best I could, I hope you enjoy it as much as I do.

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

And you have certainly achieved your goal.........the way you have formatted your gripping write is like that of an echo descending down the valley of desire while still so much on fire, but the fire being snuffed out little by little....AMAZING!! I love it!!! I am so often inspired by a video, or an image, or both so I can really relate to you wanting to create this piece!!!
A favorite of mine!!

[Muse]

Glad you understood my vision Sheila...you are a master at presentation...so this is a major compliment coming from you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very interesting piece in format and content...

never dreamed i would love you, would need you the way i do...and as much as you move me...it seems loving you in some way will be my demise...


but i will go down in flames, and go down happy to have experiences what you gave me.

[Muse]

they say it is better to suffer from heart break than to never love at all.

[.]

:: wow... the love-hate dimension of this piece... the positive-negative balance... the submission aspect... in those nearly heartbreaking and yet love-soaked images... is astounding...

:: you added a lot of texture to the chant... a lot of depth... a lot of emotion... and a lot of power... :: fantastic lyrics... is what i'd say... resounding in the ravines of emotional attachments and chaos... infinitely poetic and full of atmosphere... with just the right dash of music with the rhymes... and very well presented visually too...

Art.

[Muse]

I took somebody's advice....many lives were sacrificed for me to share my creativity...so share I did. :)

[.]

:: haha... and i certainly hope you always do... to hell with those who don't get it... :P

[Muse]

they got it...I just had some explaining to do...this was more art than it was poetry...but oh well. :))

[.]

:: ah... good... this was a brilliant fusion of poetry, visual art and music... :)

[captain]

Stunning as it is creatively done so. The lyrical feel and the smooth flow makes it so inviting to read as if i was singing it as well. Well done!

[Muse]

Thank you...always a blessing to hear from you.

[Renée]

wow ! This was very creative ! the words, colors and fading out.. Great Piece, Slither ! ( ;

[kublakhan27]

This is an incredibly-crafted piece in every way I can think of...well done :)

[Muse]

Thank you my friend.

[Lily Mae]

Perfect..xo

[Muse]

xo...hope you had a fun weekend? :)))

[Lily Mae]

I did..camping..and started another job for all weekends.. but it's more up my alley.. a Higher Self Bookstore..deals with healing..xo :) Love and miss you..

[Muse]

we had rain all three days...everything is flooding again...we did nothing. zzzzzzzzzzz

[Rita L. Sev]

An eerie piece that pulled me in and dragged me under! Had to squint a little to get it all (darn nearsightedness...) but well worth it. Unique and riveting poem!

[Muse]

I apologize about the faint print...I only wanted my words to stick out...the faint print is just from the existing lyrics in the song...I didn't want to be a accused of plagiarism. lol

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! Understood! Not complaining - anything worth it always takes a bit of effort!

[Angi]

I have never seen anyone form a poem like this. Echos came to mind as the words got smaller and smaller. I was so happy when I read your note! I had indeed heard echos! Nicely done! Angi~

[Muse]

Thank you...it was a risk...I wasn't really sure if my vision would be understood.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Wow, you have created something absolutely your own in this piece. This is poetically unique and so very creative in concept. I felt the suffering and the hope, and the burgeoning desire all wrapped into a free flowing, insanely beautiful piece. I'm left almost without words for this one. A favorite indeed.

[Muse]

Thank you, your review means a lot.

[Frieda P]

Wow that was quite unique, I'm feeling mesmerized, hypnotized by both your tragic words and haunting music in the background. I quite like this feeling, like drifting endlessly on your poetry, could be the slight buzz I've got on too ;-) ... love this!

[Muse]

I'm buzzed too, glad we are on the same page. ;)

[Frieda P]

Wooo, I get to do it again! ha,...jello shots?

[Muse]

I'm not picky...I just finished screw driver.

[Frieda P]

I can play that tune too.

[Muse]

I think it's best we don't get together...I think we'd be really bad. "in a good way of course" and no I'm not making a pass on you. lol

[Frieda P]

Hahaha awh, you're no fun!

[Muse]

so you want me to pass???

[Muse]

Let me ask my husband first...not really sure what kind of mood he is in. ;)

[Frieda P]

Woo, wait....are you saying what i think you're saying? ha ;-)

[Muse]

oh god bless you Frieda...you have such a filthy mind. ha ha ha

[Frieda P]

Hahaha always, will he be wearing a dress pray tell. ;-)

[Muse]

lmao when he reads this thread I'm so getting a spanking. The dress got ruined because of way too much fun. I think he has a fireman's costume in the closet?

[Frieda P]

No not that, my son is a firefighter, any other uniform, can he do a cop with handcuffs? haha ;-)

[Muse]

I'm laughing too hard right now to give a response...I need time out .

[Frieda P]

Lmao....I'll wait.

[Muse]

I just defiled your wall..forgive me. xo

[Frieda P]

Ha let me go check....

[Frieda P]

Now I literally know what ROFL means!!! ha x

[Muse]

you can um...delete that. ha

[Frieda P]

Now what fun would that be, returned the favor!

[Muse]

heee heee heee pooof!