This time I could say I was truly inspired by both music and imagery. I wanted to see if I could spin off my own poem based on a famous song and some well-known lyrics. The reverberation of her voice made me feel like I was in a canyon surrounded by beautiful echoes...I tried to share this emotion the best I could, I hope you enjoy it as much as I do.
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And you have certainly achieved your goal.........the way you have formatted your gripping write is like that of an echo descending down the valley of desire while still so much on fire, but the fire being snuffed out little by little....AMAZING!! I love it!!! I am so often inspired by a video, or an image, or both so I can really relate to you wanting to create this piece!!!
A favorite of mine!!
Posted 11 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Glad you understood my vision Sheila...you are a master at presentation...so this is a major complim.. read moreGlad you understood my vision Sheila...you are a master at presentation...so this is a major compliment coming from you.
"your resentment I admire"
would rhyme.
Otherwise, it was such a blasting poem. So well written, so well presented, so well arranged, so well did you do everything. You do things so differently from others and that too so nicely! Kudos :)
very creative...loved the fade and the reverb effect......
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
thank you Carol...some found it to be irritating...but I appreciate honesty...this was just an exper.. read morethank you Carol...some found it to be irritating...but I appreciate honesty...this was just an experiment.
nice one
great imagery and word choice.
the structure of the poem gave it more clarity and made it more memorable for the reader.
by the end of it I was singing it..
but the only downside is some words were tooooooo small I couldn't read them.
other than that, its a great write.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
I apologize about the faint print...I only wanted my words to stick out...the faint print is just fr.. read moreI apologize about the faint print...I only wanted my words to stick out...the faint print is just from the existing lyrics in the song...I didn't want to be a accused of plagiarism. lol
This is really well done. I always loved this song. So haunting. You married the lyrics with the song in a kind of fade in and out just like an old LP. "Our secret Eden caught fire/no one can save me but you." The dichotomy of heaven/hell. The secrecy. The irresistible. The pleasure and pain. The Analog Kid approves. This is close to something I was trying to write presently (in the same theme). Favorite.
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