World on fire...

            

 

 

 

 

 

 

                                

          no

 

 

 

 

 

                                

         no one can save me

 

 

 

 

 

         no

 

 

                

                        no one can save me

 

 

                                                

no one can save me but you

 

 

 

                    my world was on fire

 

 

 

            what a wicked desire

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

                                 An ocean made of sapphire

 

 

 

                  my heart is breaking for you

 

 

 

                                   our secret Eden caught fire

 

 

                                                

 

                           no one can save me but you

            

 

 

                                    

    I was treading an empire

 

 

 

                    dreaming and believing in you

 

 

 

                                our dance felt like barbwire

 

 

 

            lost in the wavelength of you

 

 

 

                                    A mirage made of hellfire

 

 

 

                             looking and searching for you

 

 

 

                                    might our energy expire

 

 

    

                loathing and hoping for you

 

 

 

What an oppressive attire

 

 

 

        drowning and swimming in you

 

 

 

    your resentment I admired

 

 

 

burning and dying in you

 

 

 

        No one can save me

 

 

                

                  no

 

 

 

 

                  no one can save me

 

 

 

 

                             no

 

 

                                                

no one can save me

 

 

                                                

              no one can save me

 

 

 

 

   no one can save me but you

 

 

 

                    my world was on fire

 

 

 

            what a wicked desire

 

 

 

 

I never dreamed

 

 

 

         I'd meet somebody like you

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

                              

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

  

Author's Note

This time I could say I was truly inspired by both music and imagery. I wanted to see if I could spin off my own poem based on a famous song and some well-known lyrics. The reverberation of her voice made me feel like I was in a canyon surrounded by beautiful echoes...I tried to share this emotion the best I could, I hope you enjoy it as much as I do.

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

And you have certainly achieved your goal.........the way you have formatted your gripping write is like that of an echo descending down the valley of desire while still so much on fire, but the fire being snuffed out little by little....AMAZING!! I love it!!! I am so often inspired by a video, or an image, or both so I can really relate to you wanting to create this piece!!!
A favorite of mine!!

[Muse]

Glad you understood my vision Sheila...you are a master at presentation...so this is a major compliment coming from you.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

You have Achieved what you were reaching for here
your words look like an Echo.


BRAVO what a AMAZING Job here.


I love it Wickedly Beautiful.



Thank you for this piece and your lovely review and comment
you left me.



Blessings. kindred poet

[Anand Sehgal]

you made the internal crisis very evident through the scattered form. Brave and fresh attempt. keep it up :)
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[Jack Isaac]

Muse, you must be seeing your thumbprint better than your ancestors ever dreamed possible. ☺
I'm so glad to see you working with a music angle...
Words without music are like songs without lyrics (ya know?)
So, the crescendo in this rises up to explode in a symphony of fire and barbed wire! YES!
Bravo to such bold brevity! Your intro says "What?" and your conclusion says "Oh, That!"
Your waveform is an Archimedes Spiral....so nicely presented.
How have you been?

[Lucifer Jones]

This is an incredible piece of art. You share the emotions with your reader amazingly well. I'd love to see this done as a spoken piece with the audio and video backing... This is so very well done. Love this immensely.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Pardon my French but... holy s**t!!! I feel the fire and pain here... it's searing...

To drown this way, is more that one can bear....I am truly hypnotized by your style of writing...
Nobody does pain like you girl!

It's like a stab in the heart... but oh, such a beautiful ache....xxxxxxxxxx

Superb penning!... you are a genius, you know... ;)

[Muse]

genius?

takes one to know one. :))

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Let's not forget that you are a legend here....xxxx

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to me, so very liquid...saturating. Molten lava? lol

[Michelle N. H.]

My God.. I'm spellbound by this piece of art.

[Leigh]

Function and form all rolled into one to achieve great effect, this took me with you

[Aristede Craig Jr]

amazing beautiful

[Bridget Mcmaken]

A very well written piece of work. Great job!