Fly TRAP!

My garden would be beautiful, but not complete, not without something a little out of order...like a venus fly trap, the carrion flower, some opium.

 

 

 

 

 

I think your Alice forgot to tell you about me.
This garden of hers is not what it appears to be.
Surrounded by roses and the sweet humming bees.
My stems perk and tickle because I know you see me.

 

Thirsty; I open my buds to receive the fresh rain.
Hungry; you prick a ring finger and flinch in brief pain.
I feed....you smile, in knowing I can never be tamed.
Your lips whisper out, "Grow, and take these flies for fresh game."

 

All this affection, I thought Alice would be jealous.
Attentive with a love that seemed secret and zealous.

Keeping me safe, guarding me with a golden trellis.
I am your Venus fly trap, hungry, bold and luscious.

 

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Dayran]

A pearl in an oyster is not there by mistake. It may wonder about its creation as an irritation or it can see itself for the beauty of symmetry and the inspiration it creates in the eye of the beholder.

The fly trap doesn't put out a signboard about danger ahead. But of course if it gets self conscious ... . Tantalizing!

[Kourtney G]

I love this , it is written very well. I also love Venus fly trap plants. They are truly fascinating! They sell little bitty ones in the stores. I have always wanted one , but never managed to end up getting one.

Your words flow smoothly together and I like the rhyming of your poem. Well done. :)

[Ruth]

Only you can make something sometimes sinister seem so damn beautiful! Gorgeous! Surreal and flows with ease, wonderful ♥

[Kenneth The Poet]

The ring is not complete without the jewel. And I see the inverse here, the flytrap is the oddball offset by the beautiful around it. That's my take.

[Larry Dyson]

what a transition in styles...I love the new freer you! Laury

[Muse]

glad you enjoyed it. It was so much fun to write.

[Angi]

My kids had a venus fly trap. What a viscous little thing! They went on to have a pitcher plant, too. Flesh eating plants made my kids so happy. I wonder, should I have been worried? Ha! I agree, the average garden is so boring. I like the thought of little barbs planted throughout the daisies. Angi~

[Muse]

I want one...really I do! :))

[Angi]

We found them at our local gardening center. Not a chain, more of a mom and pop place. You should call around!

[Muse]

My kids are morbid like I am...they would get a kick out of it.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

The the invocation of Alice in this one...indeed, the garden of her "musings in Wonderland" comes alive in your lines. I agree, my garden in not complete without the addition of something a little "off color" or "out of place", fore that is where beauty truly lives. Thorns are beautiful, if not dangerous... Danger is beautiful. Well done and thought provoking...

[Muse]

I agree...I find the common every day garden to be boring. Why not add something interesting?

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

My sentiments exactly :)

[Diane Lockard]

Beauty can sometimes be deceptive, but finds its niche among the other flowers... There is room for all!

[TL Boehm]

There is something so compelling about this poem. Perhaps it is that theme - a predator among the gentle harmless flowers. That lurking thrill. Not only are we drawn to a little danger - perhaps we who write are a bit dangerous.
On a lighter note, I find flytraps fascinating. And this was a wonderful poem, in awe of that last part - rhyming zealous, jealous and trellis NIIIICE.

[Jon Roggie]

I like this. Stopped in and waited a while listening to "Tom's diner". After a first choice, now I will need to try some more.

[Muse]

Ha ha Tom's Diner...I'm a 90's chick what can I say, I like the old alternative stuff.

[Buddhistboy73]

Ah the venus fly trap.....the adventurous, seductive attracter of all adventurous souls....I like this poem, as it reflects the adventurous side of us human beings,.....suggesting erotica, freedom, and fun!
A great write...:)
From the first line...." I think your Alice forgot to tell you about me...."....to the final line....:)
BB

[Muse]

thank you, your review means a lot.