If you don't know Odilon Redon or George De Chirico you should do. Symbolism, Surrealism, all here but tied with something more A desperate but incredibly rich and darkly beautiful use of words that fit the darkest and yet most illuminating place. A startling poem.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
I searched both artist. I like them both, Odilon Redon especially. My inspiration was a bit darker t.. read moreI searched both artist. I like them both, Odilon Redon especially. My inspiration was a bit darker than that. The shadows...the mischievous monsters that hide in our hearts and minds. I wanted to tap into that, the fear of death, the fear of seeing hell in the flesh. I wanted the reader to feel uncomfortable. I wanted to venture into a forbidden world of misery.
I so love this :) A dark piece at the right time of year, what a buzz! lol
Great song too...this is awesome, intelligently written, goosebumps time :)
xoxo
What an ending! (And have I ever told you that NIN is my favorite group? :P Just sayin'.) I think Trent himself would be enamored by this one. It's very moving the way you've constructed this series of cut-throat observation with grim and seething imagery. This part is fantastic:
Picking, peeling apart, the flesh of forgotten dreams.
A piracy of ruins; filled
with laughing skulls that cannot scream!
Really liked that. Also, 'only the purged gets buried without a face.' That's fantastic and brimming all of itself. So delighted to read your words every time I stop by your corner, you enlighten and fascinate me, miss poet. Thank you for sharing.
My dad use to tell me. He was damn before he was started. A Mexican/Ojibwa man in a white man world. This is good poetry for thought. Took reader to many places. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote
Hi Muse, Not seen much from you recently. Very black and deep. Evil ravaging unabaited and without remorse. Loved the stanza
'Picking, peeling apart, the flesh of forgotten dreams
A piracy of ruins; filled
with laughing skulls that cannot scream!' belter of a passage!!!!
~ hahahaha... oh, how i love this... fabulous opening with the "circus" reference... "to ripen the accused" is amazing imagery and insightful... "evil is calm"... oh yes, it is... brilliantly said... three words and BOOM...
"No sound of a beating heart. Only
confusing words spoken from the book,
of a darker art. "
~ wonderfully poetic... "laughing skulls that cannot scream" is oh so brilliantly horrific... i love "the high court below"... hahahaha... you said it... that's what it is... brilliant use of the word "dissolved" and the phrase "bottomless bowl"... excellent alliteration there too... "attending devils" indeed... and then is my favourite part... about "etiquette"... oh, you nailed it... this was super fun... hahahahaha... i can't stop laughing... i love, love, love this post... and no... no wicked one wrote it... the one who wrote it can see the wickedness that everyone hides in the dumbest of ways... hahahaha... you expose them well... sweet girl... i can see that they amuse the muse in you... stunning work... my eyes popped out and are doing a little dance in the air... :P
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Thank you serah...there is a moral message deep beneath the surface of all of this. So glad that yo.. read moreThank you serah...there is a moral message deep beneath the surface of all of this. So glad that you've found it. xx
12 Years Ago
~ you're very welcome... i just loved the way you wrote this piece... it's definitely one of my favo.. read more~ you're very welcome... i just loved the way you wrote this piece... it's definitely one of my favourites by you... and since i'm studying the evil in people as ardently as you these days... i can almost see what you've seen and depicted so brilliantly... shine on, girl... :)
Intense and vivid...maybe it's just me but the form gives it the look of a passage from some long-lost book of dark chronicles if that makes any sense...anyways, great work^^