If you don't know Odilon Redon or George De Chirico you should do. Symbolism, Surrealism, all here but tied with something more A desperate but incredibly rich and darkly beautiful use of words that fit the darkest and yet most illuminating place. A startling poem.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
I searched both artist. I like them both, Odilon Redon especially. My inspiration was a bit darker t.. read moreI searched both artist. I like them both, Odilon Redon especially. My inspiration was a bit darker than that. The shadows...the mischievous monsters that hide in our hearts and minds. I wanted to tap into that, the fear of death, the fear of seeing hell in the flesh. I wanted the reader to feel uncomfortable. I wanted to venture into a forbidden world of misery.
"All abiding to the spirits of ineffable marveling." powerful indeed. it has a subtle rhythm which makes the poem even more scary , on the fact that the rhythm creeps on you only at the end! amazing use of words , truly you are a magician of words. Bravo XD XD XD XD
"Only the purged gets buried without a face.
There's no drop of grace......
no not a trace."
I love how you played out the intensity and how you added dramatic effects making it look like a story. And once again, as I read your words, my mind was spinning!
this is awesome! it really does remind me of the fiery pits of hell and ghouls. you summarized and generalized the most gruesome of all things quite well here
Dark, wild, dangerous and intrinsicaly morale. Breathtaking work that frankly leaves your head spinning. Superb.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
spinning head? :P
12 Years Ago
It's an Exorcist thing... or... you know that buzz you get when you meet someone who takes your brea.. read moreIt's an Exorcist thing... or... you know that buzz you get when you meet someone who takes your breath away. When your head fills with Jelly. That sort of thing.
Reading you when you play this tune is like becoming familiar with a shy element of such dark weight it is not known on the periodic table.
Your words feel like a burning reflux of dark matter from a super-active black hole inside our souls, inside our souls.
The artifice you put into the appearance of your lines gives a visual disturbance which underscores their menance. It is as if you are privvy to forbidden knowledge. Your lines allow us to look through the dark lens within you that is your natural born gift. Thsough said lens you show us things we may not otherwise see. Some will see them more clearly than others.
I think the strongest lines are, 'Evil is calm'. Just three words, restrained and dignified and all the more potent because of said restraint. It is as if they words are so confident of their own power they do not need any further elaboration of embellishment. This confidence is chilling. The 'bottomless bowl' is a disturbing notion, suggesting, as it does, that there are greater depths await us within said black hole. The 'quivvering lip' is absolutely visual. We can't read that dab and fail to see said beasts lip a-quivver.
I also like the face/grace/trace dismount.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
When writing this it did feel as if I was privy to sharing information from the underground. These .. read moreWhen writing this it did feel as if I was privy to sharing information from the underground. These minions want humanity to know that this place is real maybe? So they are now my Muse...scary I know. Who the hell knows where I come up with this stuff, it's the only explanation I have. Evil is calm...this was added later to the poem. I felt it was missing something. What makes evil so scary in my opinion is that it can be so CALM. This is why most people never see it coming. The music..cold industrialized music. If hell had a sound keeping beat with the screams..I imagine they would be playing music such as this. Thank you Ron..for digging deeper into my psyche.
There is a great great pic I will send you. Can't remember the artist, but it is in the Louvre in P.. read moreThere is a great great pic I will send you. Can't remember the artist, but it is in the Louvre in Paris. Title: Pandemonium, based on Milton's Paradise Lost.
12 Years Ago
funny you mentioned that, because I was thinking of using that pic, but couldn't find it on the inte.. read morefunny you mentioned that, because I was thinking of using that pic, but couldn't find it on the internet, could not remember the name of writer. If you have it, I might even change my image used here.