Coming Home - A Song

Lyrics to a song I'm writing

It's been months since I saw you through

Anything but a bottle

It's been years, six long years

Since I poured over my bible

Sometimes when I can't sleep

I think of you and weep

Sometimes when I can't think 

I picture you and want a drink

Just like a dog, you trained me well 

You taught me to think of you

Whenever I heard a cathedral bell

Jaded glass, I touch my flask and

Hear it empty and so I pass to

Missing you and missing me and

Everything we used to be

It's not your fault

That I'm not happy

It's not like you didn't try

To tell me to walk on by

You said I'm weak tenth time this week

You said something you'd regret

I'll drown liver, forget it all

Imagine what I could have said

My heart is sore from all the wars

We have over the phone

I'll call you back and you'll attack

Maybe I should leave you alone

I bought a ticket for you

Now I'm sitting on the train

Months ago, I knew I'd lost you

Now I'll cross the world in vain

It's not your fault

But damnit did you even try?

It's not my fault

I'm coming home to hear you lie

The chance I gave up, the people I loved

All gone so I could hold your hand

I'm on my way to not love you

You're on your way to your next man

If I can't find a girl like you 

I'll find a drink and love her too

What else can I really do

When no one else is truly you

It's not your fault

But damnit did you even try?

You let me walk here

And didn't let me inside

It's not your fault

But damnit did you even try

Telling me what you really think

While looking me in the eye?

It's not your fault

But damnit did you even try

Thinking of that kind of love

You won't get from another guy?

It's not your fault

Damnit I shouldn't have tried

Now I'm standing in the cold

Trying to hitch a ride

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

This has a very nice rhythm to it... almost like someone just sittin back telling me a story that I get lost in... By the end I was caught up in the emotions and left me with a feeling of yea it hurts but so what..... I REALLY liked the last stanza... good job!

[Ella]

This is really good! I like the rhyme scheme.

[Ella]

I thought overall it was really good. The rhyming was good, and the overall message of the song was sad, but well-written. I thought there were a few lines where the rhyming could have been better-such as "wars" and "phone."