Unchained

UNCHAINED
(01.13.08)


Him so often smitten,
By the hum of,
Her kitten,
Her pulsating rhythm,
Enough to,
Change his ambitions,
Internal fires erupting,
Enough to,
Unchain his,
Emotional commitments,
Her life juices,
Naturally sustaining,
Dripping love,
Drenching,
Once closed fists,
Her palms,
Now connected to his.

Reviews

[Ani Ashford]

I hope you post more of your writing. It is evocative of many thoughts, painting mind pictures. This poem is tenderly erotic in your words. The final lines are truly beautiful of that moment of not just ecstacy but mutual surrender.

Once closed fists,
Her palms,
Now connected to his.

Open palms, hand to hand, transfers even yet another energy.

Thank you. Please post more of your writing.

[Angelic Darkness]

I really like the way you mingle words together like for
example: Him so often smitten,
By the hum of,
Her kitten

This is fun, erotic, and has a playful nature to it.
Thank you for your review....AD

[Lyrical Love]

This is the epitome of the sweetness we crave in a relationship. The subtle eroticism was well done too. Quite an enjoyable read.
~Loving your scribe in the D....
Lyrical Love831

[Dalaina Renee]

Wow! Good poem!

[Nevah Ann]

Wow, really nice work. On my way to read some of your other stuff.

[sk8tagirl95]

I really enjoyed this poem. It has so much put into it and that just makes it all the while better to read :)

[Satine]

Nicely done as I randomly flip through the "new writing" tab...the piece is erotic yet not, softly stated yet there is passion. I both liked/disliked the "kitten" line and can't say why for sure...maybe because it is very creative on the one hand but then on the other the sudden visual took me out of the poem for a second. Other than that I enjoyed this piece.

Satine