Trouble Free

Trouble Free

A Poem by Tony Hwilka

Relax with music

as it massages

the inner fibers of our brain.

Permitting us to drift

to the edge of fantasy

where there are no shadows

of yesterday

© 2008 Tony Hwilka


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I love the phrase "shadows of yesterday". Although this poem is brief, it really captures the reader and makes us want to think -- savoring the sound of each line, I love the poem the way it is, but I thought it might be improved by keeping the sense of drifting by changing the line "permitting us to drift" to "setting us adrift". It still keeps the same sound, but makes the metaphor work better. Either way, it's a beautiful poem....very evocative

Posted 16 Years Ago


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Oh, I like this!

"Permitting us to drift
to the edge of fantasy.."

I live there. lol

Great job!



Posted 16 Years Ago


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Music is very soothing to me.

Posted 16 Years Ago


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Ah, "no shadows of yesterday." Your poem invites us to a country where we need to go often: music lulling us to relax, worry-free, light as fresh air.

Sal

Posted 16 Years Ago


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What a wonderful piece that I think everyone relates to. Makes me feel happy just reading it again. Lovely.

Posted 16 Years Ago


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Yes, come to think of it....that's what music does Tony as we loose ourselves
in its pleasure....................."as it massages the inner fibers of our brain"

You've penned your thoughts well in this little piece!

~ Helena ~


Posted 16 Years Ago


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This is too true.. I am attached to my MP3 player. It helps me escape during my crazy work day. Creativity gives the mind the chance to explore and escape the norm and the daily confines. This poem is short, but since I identify with it so well.. I greatly approve! ;p

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Tony Hwilka
Tony Hwilka

Willingboro, NJ



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In the land of poetry I've been very luckly. I have had my own poetry show on radio station WTTM Trenton N.J. reading my poetry from 1982 -- 1990. Was president of the Southern Poets of N.J. and still.. more..

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