The Luck of the Return (Sad Savior)

Before you,

there was anger,

there was anguish,

and there was danger,

there was baneful arguments,

and sardonic hate,

all I wanted to do was escape.

Abstruse thoughts,

phantasmal environment,

there was a dark hole

where my heart should be,

acerbic blood running through

my veins,

and my delirium mindset

drove me mad.

The white horse running along the

amethyst horizon,

making me realize how unique this night was,

and all the malevolent thoughts

washed away, 

your paramount eyes

made my heart escape its cadaver.

My cavernous eyes

turned into scintillating orbs of

impeccable halcyon,

because of the way you looked at me.

You saved me,

from myself,

I guess everyone needs a hero sometimes,

to realize that they are worth 

saving. 

Reviews

[Marie Harrison]

Beautiful poem...I'm in awe!

The second stanza is my favorite

Abstruse thoughts,
phantasmal environment,
there was a dark hole
where my heart should be,
acerbic blood running through my veins,
and my delirium mindset
drove me mad.

[Calypso]

This is crazy good. There is an element that sings to your heart.

[NightShade]

We're talking poetry of the brightest magnitude, right here! The emotions run like a brook in the spring and the images are majestic. The comparison of before and after shows a type of growth that is plain for all to see in this creation. Exceptional work. A cut above.

[light and ashes]

This is beautiful. My favorite stanza is the last one :]

[TonyJay]

A LOT OF BIG WORDS. Holy crap i believed i just digested 12 new words into my vocabulary. Make sure your target audience knows what youre saying. Dont get me wrong it was an excellent poem, but use itteligent words that people actually know.

[Becky C Strukamp]

What an outstanding, amazing write. The last stanza, wow, "you saved me from myself" so powerful, "i guess everyone needs a hero sometimes, to realize that they are worth saving" more powerful words. I can so relate to the message and the meaning and oh boy, the saving, The entire poem is penned brilliantly. Every word, every line, every stanza speaks volume. I loved it. Thanks for writing and sharing this amazing poem.