Teenage Problem

"Who are you?" The person reflected in the mirror asks,

"I'm the person you wish to be, but you hide under those masks."

If I could be like that, 

maybe some people would stop referring to me as fat.

I close my eyes, stepping in your shoes for a couple moments,

maybe then people would stop all of these torments.

But then I open my eyes, realizing that your shoes are filled.

By you.

Author's Note

Basically, I got inspiration by the quote "everyone else is taken, so just be yourself."

Reviews

[biggerthenu]

lovely write self conference is very important be yourself your reflection in a mirror isnt even you only a picture and u can never read a book by its cover

[Ruth]

Oooohhh...nice turn around! Cleverly thought out love..I love this! We can but be ourselves! Great poem hon! xx

[Alskar]

This deals with one problem, so the title was a bit misleading. However, you deal with the problem very well. I love the resolution at the end that the speaker is finally comfortable with who they are, whether they are socially acceptable or not. This is therefore a very relatable write, and quite raw.

[DontBlink158]

Great poem, and a great peom for the quote!!

[Marie Harrison]

Sweet right!

[tynamite]

The simplicity of this poem works really well, as it doesn't try to be too many things at once. You get a simple message and communicate it so effectively. Reading this takes me through the things that the person in the poem would think to themselves, and the distress that they go through.

[joshua deathdealer]

Interesting write. I really enjoyed it...xx

[OtherWorldWoman]

The simplicity of this poem makes the message within it stand out even more than if it were lengthened. It is inspiring, and very relatable, which are two important factors in a piece of writing, in appealing to those that read it. Lovely work.

[Ripple of Aqua]

I really like the transgression and the movement of this piece. Forcing you to think about the steps you've taken.

[Rae]

Interesting point of view. Reall makes you think. Keep writing!!