I hope you never wanted love

Through the shadowy trees of the midnight hour,
I can see you through the crooked and cracked branches,

Your glowing yellow eyes pierce deep in my soul,

Your fangs made of your lovers neck bares its existence.

"I want them to hear you scream." 

"Or we can come out of this one the same team."

Your skin that looks like its made out of paper,

Your ego that is the size of two twin towers,

Your melancholy eccentrics and your apathetic demeanor.

"Bring me fire, bring me ice, bring me blood."

"But I'll be careful not to drown you in a flood."

You are the reason why my existence is afraid of you.

Reviews

[miguelbovine]

Can someone say classic

[OT]

brilliantly descriptive - ""Bring me fire, bring me ice, bring me blood." - the flow is spot on too - imagery great! nice job I enjoyed!

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Nice work hard reviews never defeat the deep desire of love.....

[Becky C Strukamp]

It was quite chilling to read. Your conversation with what appeared to be a predator was magnificent. Excellent Poem

[rae52]

really good i enjoyed it

[Dayran]

It appears to me you speak of the predator and the need to appease it. That is an ancient custom. What remains is our will to survive and the way that we employ it in our cause. We need to create social acceptance for it. We fear our lives because we have to kill to feed.

[w2de35657u687y4324rf]

"...of two twin towers...."
Doesn't the original 'two' tell us the exact number of towers? So, by that logic, the 'twin' makes the sentence tell us of four towers. You multiply the number with the repetition, see? I don't know if that was your intent, but it bothers me, slightly. I used to have this problem, too. Don't worry. This was an interesting piece and I look forward to seeing more from you. Good job.
SAS

[J Todd Underhill]

Nice write, I couldn't help but think you might like some of my work along the same lines check out www.soundcloud.com/j-todd-underhill and let me know what you think

[tynamite]

I like how wretched and conniving this sounds. This is really clever. It feels like I'm watching a cinematic movie when I'm reading this. Through the shadowy trees....through...branches.

[Rae]

Dark. I like it! Keep writing!