my only two sentences

I wish you would treat me better

I would've want you in my life

I almost loved you, its a good thing I didn't

the only feeling you have was pure hatred

you treated my family like crap

you never cared about my illness or fever

I will make you pay for the things you done to me

alll you want to do is ruin our family and be a jerk

my heart is better without you, it will always be

never in my life will I call you "father" 

 

Author's Note

I know that this is a short poem, but I tried my best to come up with a poem. This is a poem for a jerk (cough) *sshole '(cough) that lived in my life 6 years ago.
Any reviews?

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

My dad had the same issue with HIS dad (I don't think he saw or heard tell of him past age six) so I totally understand where you're coming from here...he was a stronger person because of it though...and I'm sure it will have the same effect on you though you're already a great writer so it probably already has :) 100^^

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Thanks ^_^

[kublakhan27]

No problem :)

[Denis K.]

Im glad that ham licker got outa your life :)
I should say that this is amazing. Good work!

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Thanks ^_^

[Heather]

This poem is brilliant, completely clever, unique. I loved it!!!!

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Thanks ^_^

[Miiki]

It's awesome! I love how the poem and the two sentences are still able to talk about the same thing and still be amazing. I love it, and it really touches me :)

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thank you ^_^

[Miiki]

you're welcome :)

[Destinyxi]

Damn this is freaking awesome. I love the creativity and the bolded bigger words forming its own sentence. Awesome job!!

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Thank you ^_^

[Speak in Silence]

I actually know how you feel. My dad was never a part of my family because he was off going drugs and s**t like that. I feel like experiences like me and you have gone through make us stronger in life. I love this. Its an amazing piece :)

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Thank you ^_^

[Speak in Silence]

You're welcome XD

[Rhianne Ney]

you done- can be you've done..
Your point here is a heavy one...
I have a complete family and somehow I can't relate but I felt you're hatred and grief...
The father here surely isn't deserving to have a child like you...
But still I hope you might be able to forgive and he might be able to forgive because scars are beautiful when they're fully healed (:

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Thanks for reading ^_^

[Rhianne Ney]

you're welcome.. just returning the favor...

[FrancescaX]

I hear about horrible fathers a lot. It's good that you can express yourself with a nice touch of uniqueness.
Hey... don't let his actions get to you so much so that he rules your life, ok.
He is a jerk but he is seriously missing out on a great person.

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Thanks for reading

[FrancescaX]

You are welcome.

[AK]

Amazing poem! You expressed your emotions very well. Superb. Keep writing!

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Thank you ^_^

[AK]

Anytime:)

[Irvette Dauphine]

I know what you feel, this poem is describing that
Like it.. Great job :)

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Gracias amiga :D