my only two sentences

I wish you would treat me better

I would've want you in my life

I almost loved you, its a good thing I didn't

the only feeling you have was pure hatred

you treated my family like crap

you never cared about my illness or fever

I will make you pay for the things you done to me

alll you want to do is ruin our family and be a jerk

my heart is better without you, it will always be

never in my life will I call you "father" 

 

Author's Note

I know that this is a short poem, but I tried my best to come up with a poem. This is a poem for a jerk (cough) *sshole '(cough) that lived in my life 6 years ago.
Any reviews?

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

My dad had the same issue with HIS dad (I don't think he saw or heard tell of him past age six) so I totally understand where you're coming from here...he was a stronger person because of it though...and I'm sure it will have the same effect on you though you're already a great writer so it probably already has :) 100^^

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[kublakhan27]

No problem :)

[g.panchal]

good poem and expression of your emotions. I may sound bad but it is good to not put personal issues in your artwork

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[Kerri Hart]

wow amazing
i am really impressd
well done
keep it up

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[Kerri Hart]

;)

[Pax]

we all have some issues with our parent but then your is much bigger, sad sad reality.
great way in expressing it.

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Oh damn. Honey we can both forget our "father" figures together! *hugs*

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ANYTIME!

[That_Girl]

I love this! I'm sorry about the situation but you expressed yourself beautifully. The sentences made from the stnazas are creative. Nice!

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[TLK]

This made me think of my own background which, at the age of 30, I still continually feel I am just properly starting to grow away from. It's like it happens in infinitesimally small stages, and at each point you are making great progress but looking back from the vantage point of the future you realise how small the movement was.

One of the best things my father ever said to me was "you are not my son". I was delighted.

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[Hotaru]

:'( my tears almost fell ...
good job!!!

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[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful and sad poem. Life teaches us many lessons. Some hurt for a long time. Not good to hold hate and disappointment. Best to leave behind and forget. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

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