my only two sentences

I wish you would treat me better

I would've want you in my life

I almost loved you, its a good thing I didn't

the only feeling you have was pure hatred

you treated my family like crap

you never cared about my illness or fever

I will make you pay for the things you done to me

alll you want to do is ruin our family and be a jerk

my heart is better without you, it will always be

never in my life will I call you "father" 

 

Author's Note

I know that this is a short poem, but I tried my best to come up with a poem. This is a poem for a jerk (cough) *sshole '(cough) that lived in my life 6 years ago.
Any reviews?

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

My dad had the same issue with HIS dad (I don't think he saw or heard tell of him past age six) so I totally understand where you're coming from here...he was a stronger person because of it though...and I'm sure it will have the same effect on you though you're already a great writer so it probably already has :) 100^^

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[kublakhan27]

No problem :)

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

Its hard when things end up like this. It really ticks me off when people try and put others down, not knowing it can permanently impact one's life

Nice write

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[David the writer]

Damn, daddy issues!

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Yeah, I know :P

[David the writer]

It was good though.

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[David the writer]

Thank you

[Redboy]

lovely lovely : )

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[EYES OF MY SOUL]

I have to agree although at first i have to admit when i started to read towards the middle i was already convince you were sharing deep emotion for a pass lover you had but at the end the very last sentence it was very mind boggling for me,caught me off guard memories ran through my mind of my farther and everything that has happen in the past 21 years of my life.

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[Oni Is Gaming]

that was sad yet beautiful

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[Oni Is Gaming]

ur welcome

[Krystal L. Elliott]

I am sorry to hear about this happening to you and I wish I could say that I relate. My father isn't in the picture as much as I wish he was, my parents divorced when I was young so I never had the chance to create a bond. The feeling of...hate or resentment came into play when I read this. It was easily felt. Also the flow was nice, it felt smooth, I didn't have to concentrate on the words to much to see what you were writing about. Very good job!

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[Krystal L. Elliott]

No Problem! =)

[Harley (arbiter)]

i can relate to this. my real father traded me for a truck when i was 1. happy days *sarcasm* good poem

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[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I am sorry that your father is like that towards your whole family. I can't believe he walked out on his family. This kind of reminds me of the song A Trophy Father's Trophy Son. I know that this does happen in reality and it's sad to think about. I am sorry that your father never cared, but just know that you have people in your life that will be there for you and if you ever need to talk then they will talk to you. Thank you for sharing.

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[Angie Diane♥♥]

No problem :)

[Patricia B. Hepler]

Yes, I have a review :)
This topic is very painful for you yet beauty created from your pain resulted in a wonderful expression of self...Your inner strength serves you well~ pat

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[poeticpiers]

I can feel the underlying pain. Spitting it out may make you feel better. Don't let the past poison the future.

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