Relax

Just thoughts while on the beach....."Donde es su case mi amigo?"

Relax

 

 

Put your toes in that sand, quick sand

Your jaw line melts into a fond sigh of recollection

The water washes worries from between your toes

And you toast to the gods of this days beauty

 

Its not home that has you pining for the simple things

There is nothing simple about eating your routine

Puff pastry moments are sweet but go down too fast

Here the flavors of the moment drip over the sides of your tongue

 

So tell me your deepest desire in crosstitch detail

Sew my lips shut with a touch from your perfect finger

With a wave and a smile you walk away knowing

That I was here and I filled your day with pearls

 

When sunset arrives with its finality and promise

When the silver fish of ideas are slippery but still

When the beating of our hearts gives way to shallow gasps

You think of me in this place and breathe a heavy sigh

 

Its time to relax.....

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[A.A.Romanczuk]

oh..oh...my worry lines are fading...I can feel that sunset engulfing me in a breath...water pressing against the pressure, breaking down the barrier...I should have read this, this morning when I was a trembling ball of stress :)

[luciddreamer]

This to me was like a mini vacation....great read :)

Peace
Robin

[OT]

this is great!!! such a great play on words which you choose so carefully, some great internal rhymes and a nice subtle rhythm throughout, makes us yearn for the beach!! (something us UKers have little privilege of haha) favourite lines have to be:

"Its not home that has you pining for the simple things
There is nothing simple about eating your routine
Puff pastry moments are sweet but go down too fast
Here the flavors of the moment drip over the sides of your tongue"

such a great play and manipulation of food related words!!

[melissa]

great job!:)

[cest la vie]

being a beach girl, the sand is part of my dna..
this is a wonderful piece that makes me want to jump in the car and head to the beach..
love that closing line...sigh

[Faraway Sado]

When sunset arrives with its finality and promise

When the silver fish of ideas are slippery but still

When the beating of our hearts gives way to shallow gasps

You think of me in this place and breathe a heavy sigh


I liked this part best. The whole poem is excellent apart from that. I loved it. Good job...

[Alicia Schroeder]

Amazing, I love this peice.. Great job.

[c.m.]

Second line, second to last line.....they truly make the poem for me. Another lovely Mexico piece from you....the softer side of you.