From the Nose up

I know it is bordering on illegal to write yet another poem about eyes....so arrest me, I can't help if they are my favorite, I am a mortal after all, and on top of that a male...string me up.

From the Nose Up

 

Liquid and lingual, rimmed in brown sugar and molasses

Deep and cautious, darting with well intentioned mistrust

Light reflects a million different epic movies, mindful, flickering

Narrowed and unsure of my surly intent, lustful gaze

 

Look past my imperfections, I’m here breathing

Look past my sketchy past, I’m here being born

Look past my need to be a man, I’m here desiring attention

 

Your eyes

Your way

My want

My day

 

Looking into them, I can see myself in the universe

Author's Note

Just make sure the handcuffs are nice and tight.....not you Ed...don't want you within a hundred miles of a pair of handcuffs.

Reviews

[emmah]

- i wrote - and entire ode - to hazy, crazy eyes once - and i'd be happily imprisoned for it - but before that - i have to say - that these are eyes like i've never read before - i recently got a tattoo - of a pair of divine eyes - and over the years i have lived - i have looked into a lot of mortal eyes - and they never came alive - quite in the same way - as they do in the delicateness and beauty of your words!

ps: agree with all my heart - with the author's note - and what a stunning review has sire left!!! :)

[just rose.]

I spend a lot of time avoiding other people's. They're too powerful. As you attest here. I like esp. the structure, you always play with structure in interesting ways.

[Robin]

all poems should be about eyes ! eyes to the heart soul universe nature ......

well done .

[melissa]

very nice i really enjoyed this

[c.m.]

Lmao....oh those Authors Notes....That line with brown sugar and molasses is so lovely. The second stanza and the very last line hit hard for sure. This is a wonderful piece. I loved it, nice write. You write eyes so well.

[Ed Hart]

eyes
tries lies
in guise of sighs
surprise surprise

[Amy Bumpas]

This is a great poems...one of my favorites.
You do the "eyes" justice:)). Some of my favorite
lines: Look past my imperfections, I’m here breathing

Look past my sketchy past, I’m here being born

Look past my need to be a man, I’m here desiring attention

[Ladysue]

This was so charming...A beautiful romantic flowing gem...I loved it...

[.]

sucker for the pwetty eyes *blink blink*

don't stop writing about this stuff..you do it so well..last line melts me :)

[Jenny Nelson]

A very beautiful and romantic piece. Whole poem is great but I really love the flow of the last few lines. Right to the point.

And what's wrong with with another write on eyes? Personally, my eyes are my best feature. Too damn bad everything else is crap. lol... sorta

Enjoyed the write much. Very pleasant.

[Lovely Lady]

Well that was beauiful till I got the the Author's Note and Ed entered..... Ha ha...
I love it... 'Look past' .... what we all need to do .
~♥~