True Beauty

A little cheese for your lactose intolerant diet.....

True Beauty

 

If shooting stars

And granite dells

Met frosting covered pastry shells

The scene could never be as sweet

As one square inch of your perfect feet

 

If rabbit fur

And beaver pelts

Met satin sheets and chocolate melts

The offspring resulting from that sin

Could not be softer than your skin

 

If Christmas lights

And festive drums

Met deconstructed cheesecake crumbs

The holiday that comes and goes

Is not as treasured as your nose

 

If candle light

And mercury

Met the majesty of every tree

The soul of the bird that lightly cries

Can be seen in the reflection of your eyes

 

Beauty casts an eternal spell

Can take a pious man to hell

That dragon’s smart so watch your back

Many men won’t make it back

Author's Note

I can't believe you people still let me play here....really...this is your own damn fault.

Reviews

[Robin]

this poem is cool in many ways , like those little scribbles on a ancient map " fair warnin' thar be dragons ... "

[FlawedByDesign]

Enchantingly surreal!
I admire your ability to take indefinite, somewhat random things and imbue in beauty. You surround them in hypnotic poetic verse which borders cheesy quite often, like, "Met deconstructed cheesecake crumbs" :)

I love the following,
"If candle light
And mercury
Met the majesty of every tree
The soul of the bird that lightly cries
Can be seen in the reflection of your eyes"

Nicely done.

[creativekat]

hehehehe i read your true beauty will you read mine

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Interesting thoughts that you have penned in this one..Some interesting metaphoric language that you have used...Sunflower

[Dinesh Sairam]

My favorite stanza :

"If candle light
And mercury
Met the majesty of every tree
The soul of the bird that lightly cries
Can be seen in the reflection of your eyes"

I loved the form. The 'if' really lands the punch. Well done.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

enchanting~ delightful captivating string of pearls of endearment with wonderfully drawn smiles at every metaphor~ what fun it was to read this gloriously humor saturated gem!!!~

[Ladysue]

A very charming poem that flow with such eloquence. Such endearing lines...

If Christmas lights
And festive drums
Met deconstructed cheesecake crumbs
The holiday that comes and goes
Is not as treasured as your nose

Wonderful work....

[emmajoy]

Wonderful .. a romantic poem with wit .. yes, wit! So cleverly written, Mr. Rowley, you seem to cross every divide when it comes to writing, surprise, surprise!

' If Christmas lights
And festive drums
Met deconstructed cheesecake crumbs
The holiday that comes and goes
Is not as treasured as your nose '

Cheesecake will never be quite the same again .. great meter here, well - throughout but, this stanza really hit a chord!

[Devons]

Quality piece of writing. And you manage to be lyrical, real, and hilarious all at the same time! The contrast between the decoratively and soulfully described imagery and the almost blunt physical object it illustrates is -particularly in the first three verses- nothing short of brilliantly funny. And indeed entertaining in the fact that the intelligence being summoned to create this imagery and humour by comparison is so much in evidence in the writing.
The only flaw in the poem as a whole I think is that the penultimate verse -although still very good in its own more serious and evocative tone- does tend to let the reader down somewhat after the rip-roaring fun of the previous verses. The smart, light-hearted wisdom of the final verse, however, balances the poem back into an equilibrium; in the sense that it is a combination of both wit and reason, which adds a touch of meaning to the aforementioned hilarity.
Superb. It was a hard choice, but I just had to make this verse my favourite:
"If rabbit fur
And beaver pelts
Met satin sheets and chocolate melts
The offspring resulting from that sin
Could not be softer than your skin"
It's that line "The offspring resulting from that sin" which gets it for me!! Bloody funny.

[Seashell]

This is quite different shall we say...and also ....shall we say...you are still allowed to play here....for a wee while longer anyway......teeee heeeee..Have a nice Saturday/Sunday.
Thanks for share....it was cute.
Babs x