My Baby

For Daniel Gardeners Contest....I wish them the best.

My Baby

 

You look into my eyes, giggle brightly

Squirming to run your own game

Pulling the reluctant kitten by the fuzzy tail

Finding that dusty cracker underneath the couch

 

It’s my baby

You baby

One baby

Cry baby

 

You don’t know that my heart ticks ragged

Beats of hopeful, fantasy futures

Strokes of genius, sparks of brilliance

I have my dreams and you are swept up

 

It’s my baby

You baby

Two baby

Sigh baby

 

Muted bravery when you can’t understand

Tired and weak, older by necessity

Eyes telling me, of all people, it will be okay

Cries for sadness so deep, I can’t overcome

 

It’s my baby

You baby

Three baby

High baby

 

Let’s hold hands for just a moment

Let’s eat the rhythm of the land

Let’s crinkle our noses in miracle and disbelief

Let’s make this beautiful time, the kind that counts

 

Because

 

You’re my baby

You baby

Four baby

More baby

Author's Note

Let me know if I can do anything....thinking about your family.

Reviews

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

You don’t know that my heart ticks ragged
Beats of hopeful, fantasy futures
Strokes of genius, sparks of brilliance
I have my dreams and you are swept up

that is a brilliant stanza.. it flows so perfectly. the image it gives is heartwrenching. i also really enjoyed the sort of pat-a-cake nursery rhyme rhythm of the piece, and the refrain running throughout eases the passages, almost adding a marching effect..

[Constance-Outspoken]

You've described so perfectly the love we share with a child... that pure, enduring, innocent love. Many kudos... I wouldn't change a thing.

[Doreen]

This is beautiful. It really touched my heart. :)

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a wonderful piece of writing. It speaks of love that goes without saying and how one person can help another. How one person can feel another's pain. Great write you have created here.

[melissa]

wonderful piece:)

[Anthony M Smith Jr]

A very good poem and I truly enjoyed your thoughts. Good day too you! I say good day to you !

[Miss Coral]

Excellent piece-- lighthearted but filled with emotion at the same time. I especially liked "Let’s hold hands for just a moment
Let’s eat the rhythm of the land
Let’s crinkle our noses in miracle and disbelief
Let’s make this beautiful time, the kind that counts"

Wonderful job. Very well done. :)

[Jasmine]

this is loving and beautiful...the embodiment of a parent's feelings. a life story.
Thank you for your review.

[OkieWonKenokie]

This is such a beautiful poem even though it seems kind of sad. I love how even though you didn't rhyme the piece still flowed beautifully. I think this is one of the very ones i really love of your's.

[Nianque]

Great write. It made me smile and feel light hearted. :)

[zombiikillah666]

this was really nice.
good write. (: