Number One Fan

Hmmmmmm.....not sure.

Number One Fan

 

You walk in, ready for love in perpetuity

To find me sitting catatonic, isolated

Your scream rains on my head like candy and glitter

Rage left over from your father’s covert fumblings

 

You grip the hammer with two hands

And smash my cold stare, ruthlessly

I’m a cracked mirror with satin teeth, luminous

You pick shards from your eyes, makeup askew

 

The only sound left is that of the fan

Oscillating for you and you alone love

Blowing sweet notes of hope and contrast

It is now, your number one fan

 

Author's Note

This is what you get when I get no sleep....so there.

Reviews

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I coulda told you not to lie down on the couch.....Im sorry I was busy burning my life down....Ill pay better attention to detail this time....you cant reap me..Ive already died.

[luciddreamer]

This one really hit a chord with me.......thanks for sharing it :)
Peace
Robin

[melissa]

you did pretty damn good for no sleep. very nice

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

I’m a cracked mirror with satin teeth, luminous
You pick shards from your eyes, makeup askew

jeezum crow.. that is an intense pair of images. i had a feeling when i saw the title this would be a dark one, and you didnt disappoint, but you also slid in some absolutely brill phrases.. just.. wicked!

[J.Black]

My suggestion? Sleep less often. It's crazy when you're sleep deprived and all the thoughts just slip out of you just like an endless rant. Well done. It's different.

[A.Lee]

Interesting. I agree, its pretty good for no sleep. I like that it has a strong feel to it and yet still maintains a sense of mystery and longing.

[Wicahpi]

Pretty darn good for no sleep! lol
I'm enjoying these late night rambles
from my night owl friends.
The 2nd stanza is my favorite one.
I can understand "father's covert fumblings"
though I love my father dearly.

[sayandeep kundu]

This is the reason why i strongly believe sleeping pill is injurious to poetic conceit.. lol..if sleeplessness can gift u with such creations, better be with it.. and never sleep for readers' sake.. lol...

wonderful piece of poetry.. :)

[just rose.]

surreal. like a dali painting with a power strip. tons of pain here, and a lot of ruminating. i hope the white noise eliminated some of it.