Last Summer

When telling a tale, the embellishment adds cohesion

The longer the time between the story and the revelation

The more structure you can see working in the background

Regardless of the fact that the structure is imaginary or boring

 

Telling the truth with words is respectable, honest, sincere

Telling the truth of what could have been is wicked, inspired, fantastic

Somewhere between the two is where the lovers camp is located

The one where we can stand for hours in the brambles and spy, hoping for skin

 

Your pen is yours and yours alone and I gift you your story

Please be sure and be honest with me and I will travel your lines

Ingesting your ideas like a poor child's Christmas candies

And in the end I will let you know if you moved me as you did last summer

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

"Somewhere between the two is where the lover's camp is located" I really like that line. An enjoyable read throughout. Cheers.

[gram linski]

haha, enjoyed this, whose truth is the real truth, the true truth, like opposite truths staring into the mirror, which truth blinks first,

[Robert Trakofler]

this is 100% brilliant and 110% pure Crowley the power of a Crowley write is all yum to this (a bit of a bloated) overgrown kid on Christmas morning! those two lines bout telling the truth pure f*****g gold deliciousness Wow this blew me away I want to stick this second stanza on my wall! I hope you jumped up and down after you read this one back to yourself the first time and peered thru those brambles back at yourself!

[barleygirl]

Reading this feels like I'm being led thru a forest of ideas & observations, not quite knowing where it's all going. The point that stands out for me is about being authentic. I also love the sparkling way you explain that special spot between telling an honest story & embellishing believably, sounding as if it must've been part of the story all along! That is where I want to reside! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

Love and adore your last stanza, this is so very good and very well written. awesome write

[Beccy]

'Telling the truth with words is respectable, honest, sincere
Telling the truth of what could have been is wicked, inspired, fantastic
Somewhere between the two is where the lovers camp is located.'

Camped there on more than one occasion, but I still want to be told a tale from time to time. :))

Loved this.

Beccy.

[Crowley]

Hey you!!! That middle ground is one of my favorite places. Thanks for the review!!! Great to see you!

[Beccy]

And great to read you again. Been absent for a while, busy, busy, no excuse really, but my muse is on the back burner. :))

[Crowley]

Need to Kick him/her/it into gear!!!after all, autumn is the time to start a blaze and warm the hands. Love ya!!!

[Lorry]

So very true that the lovers find that middle ground, where truth can be essential but not compulsory and what is said as important as what is not. Where we can lazily enjoy the scene of a picnic, forgetting we are in the middle of a minefield, until the unspoken are spoken (does my bum look big in this, it happens to lots of guys, etc.)
Love the use of ingesting, especially as a writer. We never truly know how much we ingest from all and everything around us, until that next piece is written.
Beautifully written sir. If this was a beer, it would be called class in a glass 😀

[Crowley]

Usually they just call me fat a*s in a glass!!! Lol. Thanks Lorry!!!

[Kelly Scheppers]

No one I know writes like this. What a caliber of talent you exude! And that closing line...!

[Crowley]

Yay!!! Thanks Kelly! You always make me feel better than I should...lol.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"less is more" as they say....and bare truth often wins out over crazy embellishment...
the real stories are the ones that matter and show....the embellished ones simply tell...and have no factual basis...they just lead us on.
such a True write here..."just the facts, maam"

[Crowley]

Thanks Jacob, so glad you are on this site!