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You uttered perfection with one word

And I climbed on to that word and glided

To the hearts and minds of all the men

Who listened patiently for fitting advice

 

You write the soul in textured minutes

 

You painted a stroke of ashen gray

And I carried it in my pocket, burning

To show these men what they were missing

With their misused policies and powerbroker mindsets

 

You write the mind in fractured havoc

 

You scratched the message of resolute trust

And I hurled it to the throng of hungry hearts

To teach these men of the power of love, blinding

With their post-coital regret and lustful craving

 

You write the heart in metered temptation

 

You inked a treatise of peace and meaningful tolerance

And I preached it from the top of the universal precipice

To show these men the importance of creation

Milking every drop of perspiration and understanding from historys' back

 

You write the stars in idealistic grandeur

 

 

Reviews

[Susan 🦋]

Ok, this is a thought provoking piece. Interesting concept and I would be interesed in knowing if I have it somewhat correct. This write to me reflects a spiritual aspect. In a sense, practicing what you preach. "Utter perfection with one word" I'll assume the word is LOVE. This is what I'm thinking of...
1 Corinthians 13:13
13 And now these three remain: faith, hope and love. But the greatest of these is love.
I actually find hints of the bible, written word, preaching sermons ect...
But your ending..Well! "You write the stars in idealistic grandeur"
How cruel this world is, yet look to the heavens for eternities granduer.
Well done. :-)

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the energy and the strength of the words. The poem Crowley. A pleasure to read my friend.
Coyote

[Crowley]

Thank you so much my friend, I really appreciate your words!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh, I love this one! 'in metered temptation' - that's one phrase which attracts me the most here. And this is certainly one of my favourites by you. :)

[Crowley]

Thanks Doc!!! Love it when you stop by!!!!

[Giulia King]

Oh my, this is amazing. So beautifully written. Left me in awe.
My favorite lines; "You write the soul in textured minutes" and "You write the stars in idealistic grandeur"

[Crowley]

Thank you so much. Good to see you around lately!!!!

[Giulia King]

I took the longest break from this site, lol. Thank you, I'm happy to be back!

[Ken Simm.]

So many excellent lines here. Its hard to choose just one or two. But I've got to say that last line is stellar.

[Crowley]

Ken!!!! Where is your picture?? lol...don't fade out on us! Thank you so much, this one has gotten some great comments including this one. Makes me smile!!

[Crowley]

There it is...its back!!!

[Ken Simm.]

Ye lost me then ye bampot! Niver been awa ye ken.

[Chris Shaw]

Some wonderful expression here. "You write the soul in textured minutes". I love that line. "You write the mind in fractured havoc", there's another. You never disapoint Crowley.. Such a good read.

Chris

[Crowley]

Its always good that you live half way around the world cuz I get to wake up to reviews!!!! Thanks Christine!!

[Neville]

Okay.. got the message, now I feel more than just obliged to tell you how great these words are..I feel compelled..great words these, and true my friend.... N

[Crowley]

Thanks Neville!!!! Happy Tuesday!

[Neville]

Blimey. dont time just fly.. I have been out of state so to speak so please excuse this late response... Happy Thursday.... N

[Onlyme]

This is simply beautiful Crowley. Loved it.

[Crowley]

Thanks so much Dee!!!

[Onlyme]

Crowley you always make me smile. Even in bad times. Bless you for being you. hugs. Dawn.

[Crowley]

thank you luv...that makes me smile!!!

[Onlyme]

Crowley bless you for being YOU. A TRUE SWEETHEART AND INSPIRATION ON HERE.

[Crowley]

I feel the same about you. You are like the conscience of the WC. You are as real and wonderful as they come. I hope you day is a good one.

[Onlyme]

Its better thanks Crowley he didnt need to get the feeding tube. And doctor was happy with him. So home. As he was going to refuse it. And walk out. If they offered him it. That is just him Crowley. So less stressed and happier thanks. I hope you are okay. You said. I am sure something is happening with your family?

[Kelly Scheppers]

This must garnish more than a mere two comments. I mean, really....the first verse exceeds even that! I think we need to light a fire under this place and wake some people up.

[Crowley]

Yeah, I try to review a lot of people but only a handful take the time. Super grateful you take the time!

[Kelly Scheppers]

You are so welcomed, my friend!

[¿]

Hooooo....this one sat on my mind!
Tis encouraging me while I'm getting ready with a speech which I've to present in front of my teacher today...topic is "why I was absent in the class for last few days"...am sure they'll shut me up saying that am making excuses...Alrighty...close that irony!

I got this poem so relatable also could grasp the meaningful intentions....thanks so much for sharing this...relaxed! :)

[Crowley]

Thanks Tashin, you always make me smile!!!

[¿]

You're welcome!!😌