Just Fly

Just a little diddy…think of it as country.

Life leaks, trails of tiny memories, and

Time speaks, when we're slowly sipping wine

Your head, backlit in a summer sky

Back porch talks never seem to fade from style

And when the time comes to say my name

And I come clean with all I know

I'll fly and be everything to everyone

     Just like grandma's hokey fables

     Just like building greenhouse gables

     Camping neath the boughs of an ancient oak

     Just meet me at the table

     I won't fit you with a label

     We'll save the world over an icy Diet Coke

     And just fly...

You say, you'll hold on to what you know, and

You pay, with your heart and perfect soul

My path, found you and all your reverie

New friends can't see you til you've shed your skin

And when the time comes to say my name

And I come clean with all I know

I'll fly and be everything to everyone

     Just like grandma's hokey fables

     Just like building greenhouse gables

     Camping neath the boughs of an ancient oak

     Just meet me at the table

     I won't fit you with a label

     We'll save the world over an icy Diet Coke

     And just fly...

And when the time comes to say my name

And I come clean with all I know

I'll fly and be everything to everyone

     I'll just fly...

Author's Note

song time is over, go about your business.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This does feel like a country song . . . but it also feels more like conventional poem-writing than what I've come to expect from you . . . still, always fresh & original, never cliché . . . love the assorted details in your repeated chorus resembling the detritus of jumbled love (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

While reading this, I was reminded of that movie title 'Call me by your name'.
This reads smoothly to me with a sweet, gentle undertone to it.
Such a lovely, romantic write by you, Crowley! Different from what I've so far read of you but I liked this very much. :)
I'll just fly away now lol :P

[Crowley]

Thanks Doc....I appreciate the kind words and don't go too far!!!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Crowley! And still here ;) :p

[Dusted Armor]

My view while reading was lost as a reader, Not really a format and word choice did not make sense to combine the poem. It seemed like an intro to a short story not a poem,I did not really grasp the poem as a reader. Good effort and keep penning!!!

[Crowley]

Thanks for the read! it’s a song, from a prompt.

[Connor Veenstra]

The strongest element of the lyrics, I think, is the chorus. It flows really nicely and the rhymes are well done.The issue I have is with the verses. The ending line doesn't seem to rhyme with any of the others.

[Crowley]

Those lines are purposeful, but I think you kind of need to hear the melody that is only in my head at this time..lol, doesn't translate quite as good as poetry. Thanks so much for coming by, I appreciate it!!!

[sette]

just fly... like as we come to know about life... we just fly...

[Crowley]

Exactly, thanks Sette!!

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

“And just fly...” so romantic and sweetly tender Crowley. Gentle, lyrical and very musical verses that would capture any woman’s heart I think. Ingenuous and memorable bridge with great rhythm and rhyme all through the song. I am not a country music expert, but i feel these lovely lyrics and they move me. Now I’ll go about my business- ha!

[Crowley]

Thanks A!!! I gave it a try anyway!

[Neville]

When there is nothing and nowhere else to go.... I fly.. believe me.. I fly...........thanks for the whooosh brother... N

[Crowley]

Thanks man, you do fly.

[Neville]

I do try occasionally, believe me....although I tend to soar more these days..... Neville

[Onlyme]

Aw, this was so sweet and beautiful. Very enjoyable read and great images.

[Crowley]

Thanks Dee!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I liked this song, poem...lyrics, verse...it made me think on the collaboration of thoughts and ideas shared between different writers in the creation of something new belonging to the sky...not just to fly but to soar. Always a pleasure to read your work, outstanding.

[Crowley]

Thanks Fabian!!! Always look forward to seeing you on here!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I just adore it!...we will fly...won't we...

[Crowley]

Thanks Q!!!! And yes....