Bayou Moon

Yeah another poem about the moon...ehhh

The moon smiled and told me that my hair looked swell

And I followed her to the top of that hill

The one where Rosemary lost her cherry, screaming Henry

The one where Jo Boy pulled the trigger, spreading himself thinner

Its voodoo child

You better get on home before Marie rips your eyeballs out

That bridge was made for jumping

That moon, she'll f**k  your head

Laugh at you through the bubbles sure

You best stay in tonight

At  the top of the hill, that moon put on her mask, lord have mercy

And asked if I loved her as much as Henry said

Henry was a no good cheat of a man, I'd kill him if I could

But I blushed and gave her flowers and glimpsed her cleavage

Its voodoo child

That spot just above her legs is angry

Bury you faster than Typhoid Mary

That moon, she'll f**k your head

Laugh at you through the flames burnin'

You best stay in tonight

Have you ever made love to the moon, forgot your name

Sweet whiskey dreams and the pungent smell of love on leather

She'll give you things that will make you forget sweet sunshine

Give it up for another taste of her wine, brush of her thigh

Its Voodoo child 

You made your bed boy

She'll cut your throat fine

That moon she'll f**k your head

Laugh at you through your broken dreams

You should have stayed in

Author's Note

Its all good til you dance with her, then its overwhelming, and final.

Reviews

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Its the warning sign on every great temptress....

p.s. sorry I was looking for blue steel and got caught by the moon instead :P

[Crowley]

Getting caught by the moon is a good thing...she'll f**k your head....

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

don't I know it!

[Giulia King]

I loved reading every single word of this poem but these lines;
"Have you ever made love to the moon, forgot your name
Sweet whiskey dreams and the pungent smell of love on leather"
stood out the most. Amazing job :)

[Crowley]

Thank you so much for the review and the kind words. I look forward to reviewing you as well!!

[marilyn 1225]

this should be published or maybe it is already here
tantalizing , creative, emotional and very skilled piece of writing
you write like a pro!!

[Crowley]

Thank you so much for the review and kind words. This one is published in My book from three years ago.

[marilyn 1225]

great -- it should be shared and published1

[barleygirl]

This is a freaky & tantalizing dance between desire & all the possibilities out there. I love a lightly macabre romance tangled up in splashes of mystifying imagery. Usually I don’t write this kind of stuff until it gets closer to Halloween, which puts me in the mood. But today I read several of these delightful dark nuggets & now I’m starting to get a hankering to try one myself. It’s rare to find a number of these with just the right light macabre tone for my taste (since I don’t like overly bloody reads). I feel a potful of mystery percolating. Thanks for the inspiration to write something like this without heavy imagery, but lighthearted seduction instead! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Crowley]

I wrote this on my last trip to New Orleans....that place is muse enough for anyone!!!

[Anthony (aka Mr.e)]

This is excellent, thoroughly enjoyed, jaw dropping..
Look forward to reading more of your work.

[emmajoy]

Think my eyes grew bigger and brighter as i read this.. tis powerful raw.. and yuet so plausible in its rush of happenings, the miniatures scenes coming to full colour and language to highlight! There is - forgive . such an American past put experience here.. not read similar, needs to be read by many more eyes and felt by much more attention. Suggest RRs to certain writers to inspire more reads and i admit to, help me understand the power of a post i might not normally read. And by the way, the moon and i are great friends.. we talk quite often! (not in the same way as here, i hastily add!)

[Crowley]

Haaa....a little New Awlins in your cup...thanks for the words. I always hate to ask for RRs it makes feel like a beggar. But maybe I will. It’s wierd I used to have such a foothold here and since I left for so long it’s been hard to gain traction again.