Captivating

Some people just make things better....

The empathy she showed was not born into her

Rather it was born of her, her lot, her place

Reaching for the same silver coins we all do

But reduced to tears by adolescent gossip

And the curse of being different

"Why do they tease me mother?"

She was natures art project

"Your destiny is so much greater child."

She was the mouth piece of the universe

She grew evenly, like rising, rich brown bread, soul, mind, light

And time handed her gifts as necessary, depth, love, understanding

On a hill outside of Vinton, Iowa she breathed her first revelation

If you could have seen her that day when her potential was unleashed

You would have seen her for what she was....captivating.

Author's Note

Trying to brush off the rust, hand me the WD 40 would ya.

Reviews

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This poem reminded me of a person I used to know who was very much unaware of her own potentials (and still is, I think).. the curse of being different is definitely not something easy to live with. Somehow, I can relate to that.
Your title describes how I'd describe this piece -- captivating indeed...!

[Chris Shaw]

No signs of rust here. Delightful poetry with a strong message. I very much enjoyed the read. Thank you.

Chris

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

who says you need 25 characters....profound is only one word....

[Crowley]

Lol...thanks!

[emmajoy]

Have read this three times.. first time I immediately thought of St. Thomas Aquinus.. but he hasn't the immediacy of 'your' lovely child.. The second time i whispered it to self, knowing three people who might be similar.. no, not three, two now.. Some people have that something you want to touch, hold, feel, know.. just be next to.. it's a heaing aura that people want to stand or sit within. Your precious flower was special with so much more than how she looked.. Maybe it was, is.. will always be.. a heart that truly cares.. cos that is what the third read made me feel. This makes more than beautiful words..

I must read more..

[Crowley]

Thanks, when you said that word it made me also think of the people I know who seem have a direct channel to the universe without even trying. There are people in this world that make most immediately at ease, I think these people are the ones that regulate the vibration of the planet without even knowing they are doing it.

[emmajoy]

That is a great way of putting it : the ones that regulate the vibration of the planet without even knowing they are doing it.'

Corey, I know a few who think they do!!

That idea reads like a good idea for a contest.. even if done via/from a nudge from you. I did one about love poems, way back and people seemed to enjoy.. and also, learned..

Must go food cooking.. arghh.. tarrah..

[Lavi]

Her mother was a wise woman. I loved this poem!

[Crowley]

Thank you!!!

[Laurierose]

This was truly beautiful. It is messages as powerful as this that little girls need to hear, digest, and learn. As young girls, it is they who live under the scrutiny of their peers. Having the comfort of someone, such as a parent, telling them of their worth is crucial during that period. I love the ending the most because it is then that this girl really let go of the weight of others and accepted the beauty that is she. Captivating indeed, my friend. Great read.

[Crowley]

Thanks! Its always nice when you visit!

[barleygirl]

This is a beautiful tribute to someone who’s seemingly an ordinary person with an extraordinary spirit. I have found the most interesting friends over the years are the ones who didn’t have it easy at all. You use good details to show how this can go. Middle stanza, line 4: “you’re” should be “your”. The “rich brown bread” analogy is brilliant & original, your entire poem is compelling & sincere (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Crowley]

Ughhhh!!! cant believe I did that. thank you so much. I am always intrigued by why some people in this life are an automatic draw to other people. Its uncanny and really cool. Have a great day.

[Neville]

I have to agree Crowley there are some people who have that effect... I have known a couple myself... nice write and true.... Neville