macabre libretto.

5.13.09

take the bullet & aim to kill,
immortalize the moment ;make time stand still,
brake & fake it until right goes wrong,
weren’t those your intentions all along?

you know what you did, you did it oh so well,
i thought it through & love now i’m sure
i said it first, you said it too,
i meant what you lied & now the bullets' sank through
i’m tired of believing that i stood a chance
at the emotion that ran through at our first glance,
the bleedings' gone steady, i’m just holding on,
so take it or leave it ;one breath & i’m gone

lived for the lie but you died for the truth,
you’d like to believe those words could be about you
bloods running cold as the nerves become numb,
it’s not like this means anything to anyone
but i’m sick of lying,
i’m finished trying to make you believe that i’m fine

& it’s not as if you didn’t know, but there’s no room for ’i told you so’s’,
these words bleed out as my heart's last beat
as i’ll lay unconsciously at your feet,
& when they remove my dead bloody heart,
just a burnt out light amongst the night of stars,
i hope these words are as clear as can be;
my love for you is the death of me.

 :ending the start you aimed straight for the heart,
i tried to believe you were better than this,
and there’s nothing positive left to feel,
you weren’t much more than song material.

Author's Note

the title isn't solid, but i couldn't think of anything clever. this piece is incorporated into a composition of an acoustic melody attempted to be stitched into vindicable mementos, shortcut: it's lyrics to a carol i choke out accompanied by blemished chords. enjoy.

Reviews

[Boris Jonathan Novak]

Fricken' brilliant conveyance of emotion here.

"lived for the lie but you died for the truth,
you'd like to believe those words could be about you
bloods running cold as the nerves become numb,"

Very powerful imagery. Painful, yet stunning.

Great work!

[Paladin4life]

I enjoyed the piece. I can relate to it quite well having just went through a rather unpleasant break-up. Good work!

[Cordell]

small font but I LIKED IT ALOT!

[deactivated account. pl..]

you can hear it, which is was makes it good. most lyrics don't transfer well to paper, but the way you wrote this is melodic.
the last two lines pack a punch; they're absolutely perfect.
overall this stands well on it's own as a piece of writing; absolutely incredible.

[Jessika.]

I loved it too! Wonderful!

[aberrantly malignant]

It's brilliant, I loved it.