Insane

If you wanna know what made me this way

Then look me in the eye an try not to cry

 

The pain made me wanna go insane

I had no happiness or life

I want the love that came from above

But all I got was a hit in the face

An a heart full of empty space

 

Look me in the eye an try not to cry

 

In your life I'm only a smudge

Which is why you wont give me a hug

I never gave you a kiss

So there isnt much to miss

 

If I wanted to cut

You say stop, wait, or but

When i die

You wont even give me a sigh

 

Now that you have looked me in the eye

An saw the pain that made me go insane

I wonder if you want to cry........

Reviews

[Dionysus Cain]

i enjoyed the rythm of the poem, the words are deep and have a eternity of meaning, but i took it as if you were saying that god gave up on you , or that is atleast how you felt!

[^_^KiTTeN^_^]

Wow, Danielle!!! This is a great poem. It's very deep. I can feel the pain when I read it. Your a great writer.

[Lind]

I thought this was really good. It brought back feelings I had when I was much younger (late teens/early 20's). I can really relate to this piece.

[bailish]

Ooh, this is powerful!

"In your life I'm only a smudge"
Nice metaphor.

I've seen people like this, and looked into their eyes. This writing helps to bridge the gap of unshared experience.