The Sun

I wrote this for a contest.

              In the Sky.

Don't want to look Up at it too long.

                                  Nothing will stop it from doing its thing.

 

Author's Note

Tell me what you think!

Reviews

I'm confused at to why it's rated "Mature". Unless there's some sort of hidden meaning that I am completely missing...

I'm sure in the last line you meant to write "doing" instead of "dong". ;)

Otherwise, yes, the poem is simple, but it seems to hint at something that's coming. It's mysterious, and it's really making me curious. And I especially like the font and colors.

[Lexi Nicole]

Very nicely done! It's cute, and I like the way you formatted it and how you used the colors. Really nice work ^^

-Howl

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your very creative winning poem

[Marlena]

Very cute, I liked it :)