School's no fun without spirits

Rin arrived at his first block which was Math, he hated math more than anything in the world. Rin quickly took his seat on the right to the second row third seat and sat down,he laid his head down and fell asleep , he heard his teacher voice, Mr. Katsuya, walked in. He was a young teacher with black hair and gray eyes with glasses.

 

“Ahh". Mr. Matsumoto sit up please and answer problem number fourteen for us please”, said Mr. Katsuya smiling innocently.

 

Rin got up out of his teacher and passed by rows of kids on his way to the chalk board, he looked at the problem for a second and solved it without any trouble, he then went to his sat and sat down.

 

“Very good, Mr. Matsumoto, but please try not to get bored during my class”, said Mr. Katsuya as he walked up to the chalk board to start the class daily lesson.

 

 

When the bell rung, Rin didn't waste any time to get out of the door, he then walked to his Art class which he enjoyed. Shouta   moved his books off of the desk near his as Rin made his way.

 

“How was first block”, asked Shouta as he dropped his pencil on his desk.

 

Rin looked at shouta”man, why is your hair pulled back in a ponytail and second it was okay “, he said.

 

Shouta , gave Rin a f**k off look, as he ran his hands threw his purple hair.

 

 

When class started they had the choice to draw anything they wanted, Rin choose to draw a dragon by a waterfall, it can out really good. By time the class ended Rin had almost finished his drawing. Rin   got up to go to lunch.

“What’s with the long face”, said Kasumi as he floated above Rin’s head.

“Maybe he’s sad that there hasn't been any fun today”, said Katio as he lend on to Rin’s shoulder.

 

Rin sighed and kept walking till he got chills down his spine, he then smiled “party time “,said Rin excited ,he then ran up stairs to the roof top.

Kasumi stood near Rin with his eyes closed as he pointed in a direction towards the city, where the spirit were lingering,  Kaito bite into a capsule ,that Rin's grandfather had made to help their spirits not fall into the dark oral that the dark spirits had ,so they would also turn into dark spirits.They then jumped down the roof after Rin spoke a spell to seal the school in a barre. Kasumi, Katio and Rin made their way to the city where they found Kumori and his spirit Teizo fight a spirit wrapped in black screaming something about revenge.

Teizo stepped forward as his white hair and his kimono blew in the wind, he then grabbed a hold of the spirit as Kumori spoke spell words softly “Evil spirit I release you form the pain and suffering now pass on to the afterlife”, after Kumori spoke those words the spirit turned from black to a bright light, and a little girl appeared before us.

“Thank you “, said the little girl as she went into the light.

 

“Geez ,Teizo you could have left us some fun”, said Katio and Kasumi together as they frowned.

 

“It’s not my fault your slow “, said Tezio as he crossed his arms.

 

“Awe you don’t have to be some mean to us”, said Kasumi as he floated above Tezio’s head.

 

“Yeah what did we ever do to you”, asked Katio as he shook his head.

 

“Your existent is what makes me angry”, said Tezio as he be again to pull out his umbrella, but it was an epic fell because it wasn't on him.

“Looking for something”, asked Kaito?

“You f*****g twins “, said Tezio as he reached for his umbrella form Kusumi .

Kumori sighed as Rin and he left the three annoying   spirits to play.

“Kumori don’t leave me with these devils”, said Tezio as he saw Kumori and Rin leaving.

 

When Rin and Kumori returned to school their lunch break was over and they headed to their fourth block class.

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[Lily Marie Tate]

-Rin arrived at his first block which was Math, he hated math more than anything in the world.
replace comma between math and he with a period and capitalize he.
-and fell asleep till
*Until. Till is not an appropriate word to use in writing unless it is dialog
-he heard his teacher voice Mr. Katsuya walked in
comma between voice and Mr
comma between Katsuya and walked
-walked in, he was a young teacher with black hair and gray eyes with glasses.
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-Mr. Matsumoto sit
It would sound bettwe if there was a period between Matsumo and sit
-sit up please and
comma between up and please
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- and while you’re at it answer problem number fourteen for us
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capitalize while
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-chalk board, he looked
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- trouble, he
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-“Very good Mr. Matsumoto
Comma between good and Mr.
-When the bell rung Rin
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- door, he
period, no comma
-shouta”
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-man why is your hair pulled back in a ponytail and second it was okay “
comma between man and why
second it was okay

[Lily Marie Tate]

Okay, I didn't even finish reading this chapter. It is littered with grammar mistakes. Please edit this chapter. And if you truly do not understand these grammar mistakes, please look them up. Grammar errors are really distracting. Please fix them.

[Lily Marie Tate]

-man why is your hair pulled back in a ponytail and second it was okay “
comma between man and why
second it was okay (delete this part of the sentence)