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I was feeling kind of love sick tonight so I thought I would make a little story. Sorry for the lack of editing. I am super tired but I really want to send this out there before I second guess myself

My legs start to shake violently. This can't be! I couldn't think, breath, not even talk. How could this be. I collapse to the ground and bury my head in the grass as he stands there. He looks around in loss. He doesn't know what emotion to feel. "WHY!" I blurt out. "WHY! WHY! WHY! WHY! WHY!" He gets on his knees and rubs my back, attempting to comfort me. "Its going to be okay" he mumbles in an unsure way. In an uncontrollable way I pounce into his arms. I start to cry, "TELL ME THIS IS ONE OF YOUR STUPID JOKES. JUST TELL ME YOU REALLY DON'T MEAN IT!!" He falls on his back in complete and utter shock. He presses me against his chest and runs his hand through my hair. He says in his calm presenters voice "just relax and calm down. We will talk about this when you are calm." I angrily start to punch his chest "ARE YOU F*****G SERIOUS! HOW DO YOU EXPECT ME TO BE CALM!" He grips my arm tightly to stop my blows. "WHY!!" I yelled and and cried on his shoulder. He doesn't react like a human. In some ways he is not a human. His dark brown, messy hair with grass all over it and his ocean blue eyes. Two hours pass by like seconds. He looks at his phone and rolls me off. I look at him in confusion while tears still rolling down my face. He looks at me and says in a monotone voice "it's time to go." Tears still rolling down my face "but but but." He starts to walk away "you need to get over me sooner or later. Might as well start now." I watch him walk away from me not showing any emotion. I stand up and try to walk away but I broke down and collapsed on the ground. I don't know if I'll ever get over him

Author's Note

Any feedback I accept. Thank you for reading my work, I really hope you liked it

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You said enough. Separation and heartbreak. Always painful and sad. I felt the sadness and I liked how you described the heartbreak. Thank you for sharing the excellent story.
Coyote

[Cam]

Thank you for the feedback

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Eternal Devotion]

I liked it although it was difficult to read due to the layout and I couldn't quite grasp what was going on though i assume he cheated and didn't a f*ck. Eee boys

[Cam]

Thanks for your input, my later work will make more sense, this one was more of a lovesick sadness that I posted in the middle of the night

[Sebastian Falzarano]

Ummm...
It was quick...a little jumbled...I have to get back to it later. Im busy right

[Cam]

Yeah, I figured it was like that when I woke up and read it

[Sebastian Falzarano]

I didnt mean any disrespect

[Cam]

None taken

[Sebastian Falzarano]

Okay thanks

[Cam]

No problem

[Dak]

there's a great deal of strong emotion in your writing, and that's awesome. i read this and i can feel what the story is portraying. your use of words and description can really make an impact. everyone feels love sick. it takes some real talent to channel it to a great writing piece such as this one. great work i'm looking forward to reading more of you.

[Cam]

Thanks dak, I really appreciate it