FAREWELL MY LOVE

 

 

 

 

 

To me you were the song the nightingale trills

in the lonely spaces of a music’s beat

a heart’s violin string deep in the strains

of love’s orchestrated melody…

 

A wandering minstrel waltzing into my life

from a place far beyond understanding

leaving prints sculptured on my soul

memories forever in the cloisters of my heart…

 

I won’t be the same ever again, how could I be?

having known the melody your poems sung to me

the comfort of a grieving life never having known

true love…

 

You had to go….. I knew that from the start

Oh, how I dreaded that hour

the finale of our unfulfilled destiny

a whiff of love’s perfume gone sour

 the ever slow endless metronome beating of

life ebbing towards oblivion..

 

Farewell my love.

 

~~~

 

(c) Helena July 2009

　

　

　

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Helena,

This is beautiful. You are a talented writer, but here you exceed yourself. Marvelous poetry. I just loved

"To me you were the song the nightingale trills"

and

"a whiff of love's perfume gone sour"

So expresive.

This is a very nice write. Congratulations. High marks all around.

Very best regards,

Rick

[Onlyme]

Stunningly superb language, articulate, emotional and profound. Beautiful and sad.

[Desert Knave]

Not sure how I missed this. Beautiful and sad and so well-expressed in its emotion and sense of loss. Kudos. ~Jim

[lee von cleef]

The layers of our life ferry us forward ,9.9 ,quick time , You leave me dancing on the beach in a ocean of summer time.. Fare the well.

[emmajoy]

What a beautiful farewell, what heartbreaking words. From start to finish you said what needed to be said, to me what said it all is the following, 'the finale of our unfulfilled destiny ~ a whiff of love’s perfume gone sour '

The presentation is superb, your poem sadly wonderful, each line weighed in gold.

[Belator Books]

The tone of inevitability threads its way with winsome sorrow throughout; a good, piece which seems almost whimsical yet stand alone as a marble statue in a silent portico. I especially enjoyed the line: 'a whiff of love’s perfume gone sour'. Nicely done.

[BABSIE BEE]

Good grief...I am stealing your work again...right in to my favs !! lol Beautifully worded and put together. One can feel the pain whilst reading to the point of almost welling up. Thanks for sharing.
Babsie Bee xx

[R.D.Scott]

I love this piece, such an overwelming sense of loss. And I really enjoyed the way you have compared music with love, very very touching. I also really like your choice of picture for this piece.

[LoLo]

This makes me want to cry. I feel familiar emotions erupting somewhere in the dark pockets of my heart. I have lost in the distant past. Thank you so much for sharing. Beautiful.

[Tate Morgan]

Helena
Hi I, Tate
I am new to the Writers Cafe.But I loved this poem.
I would appreciate any help you might give me
Tate

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Beautifully Sad. Loved it.