I WAS LOVED AND IT WAS MAY

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I WAS LOVED AND IT WAS MAY

 

 

I remember the bliss of a summer day

For I was young, loved and it was May

Gathering lilac flowers with perfume sweet

A certain knowing when twin souls meet…

 

 

 

Heartbeats quickened pulses with our first kiss

Soaring on the golden wings of dreams

We tasted the sweet depths of loves’ delights

A young lovers knot we tied with our promise true

Sadly a promise kept by me… not by you

 

Still I wonder where you are today

For I was young and loved and it was May ~

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for stopping by and reading my words! Helena

Reviews

[Michael]

You made think hard on this one, at first I thought it was in sonnet form. I would look at your use of "love" in second stanza with regards to singular and plural possessive. The first loves' suggest "many loves" rather than "our love." Use of the singular, love's, makes the point clear. The second I believe should be lover's.

The couplet turn at the end really set the whole of it off well and give it a personal understanding. Who has not wondered just that point from time to time?

Very nice work.

[Mannisena]

This was a wonderful, fragnant balmily sweet poem.

[Moods]

Gosh, what a beautiful picture and poem! Absolutely...exquisite.



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[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Oh young love how sweet. To be young and in love. This was a beautiful and yet sad poem. However the girl in the poem remembered it fondly. Great write Helena.

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

Time changes even love---but not our remembering of its May bloom. I always appreciate "lost love" poems that do not sound bitter, and yours certainly fell into a gentle, thoughtful category. Nice work, Helena. Sharon

[kruser23]

because you were so kind to send me some feedback, i thought i would return the favor.

I liked this, at first i didnt really, because it was kind of sugary sweet, but on further read, i really liked it. Left me with a good feeling, despite the bittersweet ending. Nice work! Kudos.

[bluessadmood]

that was so sweet...
I remember it was a summer day..it was May
gathering flowers ..they were sweet ..
i knew twin souls did meet
My dreams soared..my heart quickened..
we tasted love delights
but you never kept a promise..its you
still i wonder ..for i was still young on that lovely May day
how lovely Helena ,excuse me for i played with your wonderful words
i read them and they were so nice,so i sang them ..they came beautiful to my ears
how nice..
wonderful..

[angelina neves]

A very lovely picture you have painted with the beautiful soft colors of your words!

[Kal]

very nice and very fresh poem... and i liked the ending, well structured full of memories from the past...
well written!

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Beautiful - what a sad ending though. This is quite stunning to read. Nice cadence and rhythm. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Light,
Siddartha