THE BROKEN VIOLIN

Written for Tovli's "Menke" Contest

 

 

 

 

Morning

returns me

from deep slumber...

awake from dreaming

the same thoughts turning me

away from pretence..... pounding

senses to sensible seeing

somehow I lost along the way of

walking life's winding paths, always searching

longing for a song to call my own sweet air

tattered tunes with no lyrics..... drums with no drummer

bother violins with broken bows bending so low

angels dim the starlight void of a heavenly choir

I stir and swallow this bad bitter taste of pretending life

 

 

~

 

 

 

(c) Helena 2008

Author's Note

Incorporating "The Ten words" pretending, morning, sensible, walking, pretence, swallow, lost, returns, bother, bad.


THANK YOU FOR READING MY WORDS

Reviews

[Ocean Orchid]

tattered tunes with no lyrics..... drums with no drummer
bother violins with broken bows bending so low
angels dim the starlight void of a heavenly choir
I stir and swallow this bad bitter taste of pretending life

As a muscian this piece hv a special appeal to me .... a great read ... & you penned the piece eloquently .

[Aspiring Angel]

These ten word challenges may seem simple as you begin but find themselves to be more difficult than one thinks. LOL Great work. I may need to reboot my computer but I am not seeing your graphic. Thought you might want to know.

Hugs,
Lesa

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Very well done.

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Your poem is a well-deserved first-place winner in the menke contest! Wonderful poem!

Sal

[angelina neves]

fantastic! a really beautiful poem with lovely images

[Tovli]

this is a triumph! I happen to know how hard you worked on this. and it shows. it is a lovely menke triangle with the feeling it holds many secrets--just like menke's poems did. thank you helena for sharing this! tovli

[Feeling-Eternal]

I didn't even realize there were prerequisites to the poem until after I read it and thought it was spellbinding... I especially love the alliteration and the ending. I always love endings

[darkgurl]

Well I think this is brillant and well written, I like your creative write...Kim