THE GARDEN

For Albert's Poetry Cafe ~ Tovli's 10/40 words contest

 

 

 

The Garden

 

 

The cottage garden's perfume

Splendid in it's glory

An almost holy presence

Sends me into oblivion

A purer state...

 

Lives made of brittle glass

Seek the meaning of infinite sky

Searing sun, serene moon

Two globes of a merciful

Creator ~

 

 

Author's Note

This ten word challenge is an Advanced 10/40:
Rules:
1. Write a poem using all ten words
2. Use exactly forty words
3. The poem must use the words in order (i.e. perfume, first, merciful last)
perfume splendid presence oblivion purer glass sky serene two merciful

Unofficial entry.

Reviews

[Salvatore Buttaci]

A great poem! My favorite stanza is the last one:

Lives made of brittle glass

Seek the meaning of infinite sky

Searing sun, serene moon

Two globes of a merciful

Creator ~



Sal

[Tovli]

am I an idiot!--I just realized what "read request" means. I have some reading to do (LOL)!
This is beautiful, Helena! filled with imagery. tovli

[Suelou]

Oh this is just beautiful. A garden is indeed a beautiful scene.

[T]

This is so beautiful! I could almost smell the flowers in this beautiful garden ... You took me away with this one, Helena ... hugs

[emmajoy]

This is lovely! It so brilliantly reaches the technical challenge in a smooth poetic style.

As a gardener/designer it could be embroidered and hung on my wall.

Thank you so much for sharing

[Tony Hwilka]

Well done, I enjoyed the read. Thank you

Tony

[Deborah Shepard]

lovely

[angelina neves]

lovely!

[RHEA CROSLEY]

Very beautiful as from some one who is. Appreciate this good write with its upward flow. Thanks

[imm's place]

beautifully presented and penned, mary