AND THIS LOVE HURTS

A Rondelet written for Poeticpiers "Have Fun with Form" Challenge

 

 

 

 

And this love Hurts

Love hurts within my breaking heart

And this love hurts

When lover’s dreams are torn apart

The song of a lamenting lark

Rips through the night as you depart

And this love hurts

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Salvatore Buttaci]

I don't know how much of a stickler Ivor will be, but I should mention that the refrain needs to be four or six syllables long. "Love hurts" is only two. Perhaps "And this love hurts," or "How this love hurts," or "Oh, this love hurts." If you think he'll be strict about the rules, at manage your writing do a quick edit.

I hope you don't mind my suggestion.

Sal

[Tony Hwilka]

Ah, a good write. It brings memories back that I thought forgotten and makes me appreciate the love I have now.

Tony

[angelina neves]

wonderful! and it is so sad that love has to end...

[angelinmypocket]

The familiarities in these sad words ring so true my friend....
and what hurts the most is the fact that we regret our own self failure.
The emotional impact in this is stunning.
Love/Liz/Sis

[Helena]

THANK YOU FOR READING MY WORDS! ~ Helena

Sal, thank you so much for your welcome guidance!!

[Suelou]

Yes, it sure does. I know first hand how much love hurts.

[Tovli]

so basic! loved it. tovli

[Fran Marie]

A beautiful write~ Helena,

so very nicely expressed my friend

Fran Marie

[doreen cyr]

awesome write helena, the form looks good to me but haven't tried it yet
doreen

[Lia]

Very strong, great piece. x