SNOWFLAKES

Inspired by Sharon Miller Bolander�s Phrase: �swept away on____ for �Keeping the Dream Alive Contest

 

 

 

 

 

  

 

SNOWFLAKES

 

 

Swirling snowflakes show their secrets

I hear them whisper

as they softly sway

leaving patterns in the snow

sleet stirs autumnal colors

muddied from footsteps

fashioned by teardrops

fake diamonds differ

interred in a snow-dome

shards shatter sharp

frozen concepts

drop by fragile drop

tears sting my eyes and

are swept away on

a carpet of white lies

 

 

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© 2008 ~ helena

 

Reviews

[Jordan]

Wow, such vivid imagery that you've described here...it amazes me with the detail that you have imprinted in this work of 'art.' Your words have so much truth to them, especially the last lines with the white lies; it was simply astounding, and I believe that you did very well in writing this piece of poetry. I look forward to more of your writes, and thank you for livening up my night! This truly was a work of art, and a great blessing for me having read such a wonderful thing.

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

Excellent use of the phrase in this amazing look at Mother Nature and human nature! I enjoyed the alliteration in your lines, Helena. Thank you for joining this week's Dream challenge. :-) Sharon

[darkgurl]

"shards shatter sharp frozen concepts drop by fragile drop tears sting my eyes are swept away on a carpet of white lies" These words are so ture, like your write very well written.