STORM CLOUDS

Inspired by Tovli's 10 word challenge at Albert's Poetry Cafe

 

 

 

 

The hand painted vase shattered

Spilling a lone water drop on the shelf

Making the tea stain darker

 

The veranda wind chimes caught unawares

Jumped in surprise and little tinkling

Voices swayed awkwardly in the breeze

 

A willy-willy wrapped around a wattle tree

Spilling the pollen of yellow blossoms on the ground

Scattering leaves and branches

Across the deserted yard

 

Dried and petrified wood casualties in the scourge

Of the waterless ground dotted the red dirt

Dry bones sculpture white eerie shapes

 

The deathly silence ambush

Clouds in a heavy grey mass

Would there be rain at last?

Suddenly the heaven’s opened and I

Standing in the rain felt a lump in my throat. 


 

© Helena 2008

 

 

 

Note: “Willy-Willy”

Aboriginal word for dust storm

 

The 10 words

Vase, water-drop, throat, pollen, stain, ambush, wood, casualties, surprise, silence

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[angelinmypocket]

A wonderful write for the ten words Helena. I'm thinking your life experience entitles you to a more picturesk language than many possess. I had never seen a willy willy before...that I knew what it was...LOL. Here in Texas, we call them sand storms or dust devils. I love the vision this creates. Your writing is so very visualistic, I can see every scene in my mind's eye. Especially of fat raindrops pocking the dry sand...and what a wish come true that would be.
Love...Liz

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A beautiful poem! Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Helena]

THANK YOU FOR READING MY WORDS! ~ Helena

[Antony]

Well I can feel this to be an emotional piece, you did use the words very well, I think the emotion in this is do to the drought that has been going on in Australia for too long. Very well expressed Helena.
Tony

[*** Hey Jude***]

This is written in such a way that I feel as if I am a part of this place. The images are excellent. Very nice ~ Jude :-)

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

I felt as if I were about to be blown around in the storm! Your visuals took me there. :-) Sharon

[Windy]

Good luck in the contest though I doubt you'll need it, you did a great job here. I enjoyed the imagery as well. :)

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You've made it look so easy in this wonderful write. Great job, my poet friend.

[angelina neves]

Uau! Lovely!!! "Would there be rain at last?/ Suddenly the heaven's opened and I/ Standing in the rain felt a lump in my throat. " and when it is dry we always get a lump in our throats to see finally the rain coming!

[WordMaster]

Complete enjoyment �

Well done � you have met the challenge