Scrape-Deep Beautiful

If you know who this is about, you'll know.

Close your eyes; 

See if you're blinking,

Winking over the bright,

Shiny white lights. 

Can you see them shine? 

You're like the sun,

Only brighter. 

I thought we were almost done, 

But I was born to be a fighter.

I'm alive, and you made me lighter. 

Can I shine just a shade brighter? 

I want to be your favorite.

I want to be the best mistake 

You've ever made. 

Darling, I want to be great. 

Remember my beautiful face

And how you made it break? 

How I used to (used to?) shake? 

I still find myself shivering now and then.

I've learned how to shatter, 

And how to pretend. 

Actresses? We're good at what we do. 

I'm unrehearsed, but here's a show

Just. For. You. 

You and I will write a symphony, 

In which I will steal the sympathy 

Of everyone, even your wife. 

You want more? Go ahead. 

Take my life. 

I don't need to smile.

I've never needed to see. 

It may sound like effort, 

But I still believe. 

Reviews

[Tribute To Jadey]

Amazing moving and deep piece. I am curious, I'm not sure if this was written with a little bit of rage, or just complete sweetness.
Either way, I liked this alot. Well done

[trainwreck]

I was definitely angry when I wrote this. This was a very tough piece for me to actually write, but I'm glad it's resonated well with so many people here on Writer's Cafe.

[AlexValkyrie]

Another great piece. I loved it. I especially your unique rhyme patterns and style of writing.

Good job. :)

[trainwreck]

Thank you for the review!

[Kalee]

Really interesting rhythm and intense emotion.

[Kim's Poems]

I really love this, you have a way of bringing your words to life. So very nicely written and expressed.

[PossiblyAlice]

oh my freaking goodness, this is one of the best poems ive ever read, u should get it published!

[Rose]

Wow, girl. That was so amazing. I didn't realize what great writing you would keep churning out (as always :D) during my little hiatus. Lol. Keep it up!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This is a strong write of wanting to belong with your love! To have that feeling once again! Perfectly penned!

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

i love this...the power of wanting someones love so bad is such a strong topic and you used some very strong emotions...great write

[Dark Empress]

Love this!

[Calypso]

Great flow, great rhythm! Good job!