Lol Velocity

I wish I was lightning.

I would be there in a flash

For you, and you wouldn't be alone.

You'd have to be strong so fast

To find a lightning bolt to hold.

 

I'm a spark, but I just can't keep

Myself together in this dark

And I'll come so close,

I can strike so deep...

But baby you can't come back for me.

 

I just need to let off some steam,

You could say you've been drawn to me,

You're so different, we match perfectly,

And I love your strength, and I adore

That you only fall in a perfect storm.

 

I'm all we need to be instant friends,

Take your crushed stone heart,

Make it perfect glass...

And touch you again

Just to watch you smash.

Author's Note

Written for a contest, just for kicks. Please, tell me what you think.

Reviews

[JanuaryDreamer♥]

This is a cool poem its sure to win X)

[Deactivated_BurningDemo..]

Amazing. I love it. Hope you win.

[Breadrun]

Very nice, intrigued me from the start and was flowing nicely :)

[Nothing Personal]

Love your idea here..Fascinating..

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Very cool!

[Moflo]

I love the title! The poem had some strong imagery in it and I like your rhymes/format a lot. Good work!

Very nice.
It hooked me from the start.
Excellent job with the imagery and detail.

[Calypso]

I found this to be light heart and sweet.

[Janna]

I imagined a girl turning into lightning, it had me hooked from very start to the very end- a beautiful poem!

[dukovan]

it feels like you wrote it fast paced, and i like that, dont those always feel the most honest? could be wrong, well hey i'll be up for a while putting up my other writing, would gladly review back and forth if you wanted?