Love Me, Love My Hate

If you're the oil... I'm the match.

I'm a little surprised by this,

But my nice side is pretty hit-and-miss

And its getting tired of taking your bullets.

 

Every word on my mind

Has injected poison in the lines.

Don't you dare look out of my eyes;

you won't get off so easy this time.

 

As I recall, I'm the villain,

you're the innocent victim.

I love this silly game we play,

I hate the serious note it takes

off my lips, into your heart,

hehe! I shot you! For a start.

 

I dare you to guess how this will end.

I dare you to act, you can't even pretend;

You can't now, you couldn't then.

 

We are more consistant than I thought.

But all my thoughts are under my block;

The one I built to protect you (for a while),

You put me here! Don't be sad I don't smile.

 

Hate I understand, its not hard to grasp.

Shh.... we'll move way too fast.

Your signature is all over my hands.
The bloody ones holding you.

Should I be sorry I've let you through?

 

Author's Note

This is really, really old. Well, one of my first attempts at my style now. So feedback=awesome.

Reviews

[Zoe Jay]

I like this a lot. The opening three lines, and also the final three, are excellent. This is a very honest poem. It has a good solid rhythm and structure. Ending on a question is very effective. I think this poem reflects many relationships. We've all been here, and that is why this poem is effective on different levels. It expresses your feelings very well, but it also encourages the reader to consider how they feel about you, and about themselves, and to reflect on our own experiences. Paradoxically, there is something almost gleeful about this poem. It's a good piece of writing, thank you!

[laughinglullaby]

well i like this a lot its a beautiful write and the fact that its an angry write makes me like it a bit more heehee...

[Anna]

Anger is such a big topic in your writing again I believe think of things to write about or wait for them to come. Your style I have seen before and something about it is so familiar I believe it is because others write as you do. For the first attempt this is interesting.

[KatiePie]

For some reason this made me think of Ethan. This is a lot angrier than the other pieces of yours that I've read. Then again angry is my favorite side of sad, it's the passionate side of sad.

[Dark Empress]

I have to agree, lots of anger. I really like the "love hate" thing you got going there. Amazing write :)

[Alicia Schroeder]

There is alot of anger and emotion in this, it's a great write