Love Me, Love My Hate

If you're the oil... I'm the match.

I'm a little surprised by this,

But my nice side is pretty hit-and-miss

And its getting tired of taking your bullets.

 

Every word on my mind

Has injected poison in the lines.

Don't you dare look out of my eyes;

you won't get off so easy this time.

 

As I recall, I'm the villain,

you're the innocent victim.

I love this silly game we play,

I hate the serious note it takes

off my lips, into your heart,

hehe! I shot you! For a start.

 

I dare you to guess how this will end.

I dare you to act, you can't even pretend;

You can't now, you couldn't then.

 

We are more consistant than I thought.

But all my thoughts are under my block;

The one I built to protect you (for a while),

You put me here! Don't be sad I don't smile.

 

Hate I understand, its not hard to grasp.

Shh.... we'll move way too fast.

Your signature is all over my hands.
The bloody ones holding you.

Should I be sorry I've let you through?

 

Author's Note

This is really, really old. Well, one of my first attempts at my style now. So feedback=awesome.

Reviews

[MandaBear]

This is awesome! You really got me hooked into the writing!

[trainwreck]

Thank you :)

[MandaBear]

Your welcome=) Don't forget to check out number 3 lol You are on a roll!

[littlelilypurplebride]

P.S. thank you for your Lovely review god bless lily

[littlelilypurplebride]

this caught my attention that line is always how it
is in my home even if i have did nothing wrong always
my other half blaming god for it he never does
it out loud but i can see it on his face many
been praying for our family don't know if he will ever
change he needs to be saved but wow
this just caught my attention this write did.


These lines stuck out for me.

As I recall, I'm the villain,

you're the innocent victim.



Great write very powerful
emotion here god bless lily.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

Wow!!!......very very veeeeeery angsty, every word pierces like merciless shards...I'm liking it...

[Shardbearer99]

I love your writing style. Reading this it just flows so well and evenly it really grabs hold of you from when you immediately start reading it. Great work

[dukovan]

this writing style seems to capture our generation well, you write lyrically, but it flows into a poeticness thats just a little off, i really dig it. Every word on my mind

Has injected poison in the lines.

my favorite line, you mention its old, im eager to see how this style progressed for you. I'll keep reading more.

[Alex Zynder]

a bit abstract it seems, but i liked in none the less. i wish it was in story form so i could get to know the character even better.

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Intense! It reminds me of the breaking point when someone goes nuts, but in a good way.

[These Haunted Hallways]

Wow, totally love this. Sounds like the situation im going thru right now haha. Top notch to me. Ya did a really great job! :)

M.

Good rhythm.
Excellent imagery.
Nice details.
There's basically nothing to criticize.
Good job!