The Best Curse I Ever Had

It’s never been easy to look in your eyes.

I can gaze into your soul,

Pretending I know

What to say, or how to hide.

 

If we could fall again, deeper in the sand,

I could hold your heart,

Plead that you not fall apart,

Oh, to hold your hand,

 

To feel a soul, to feel a pulse!

I’m begging you, keep me here,

Whisper away my fear,

My darling, please, hold me close.

 

And now I feel my aching chest,

The cage reserved for a heart alone,

Lungs and blood made of stone,

Pretend, for a minute, I was the best.

 

Baby, I can feel you heal me,

The eyes that I have filled with pain,

Eyes as dark and cold as rain,

And you would kiss me back, with feeling.

 

It’s never been easy to touch you.

I’ve always had to be strong,

My heart, your heart, they ache all wrong,

And yet… You have let me love you.

 

 

Author's Note

I am a little rusty, so any feedback about rhythm and things would be much appreciated.

Reviews

[MandaBear]

Very interesting poem. You can feel the longing.Great job

[Coyote Poetry]

A curse and love in the same poem. It is about right in some cases of love. Bad love can feel like a bad curse. I like the tale and the positive ending to the poem. Good love is a blessing and we need to hold on. No weakness in the excellent poem.
Coyote

[trainwreck]

Thank you. :)

[PossiblyAlice]

I like your representation of emotion...obvious longing. I appreciate the rhymes and the imagery is fantastic :) It almost seems to me like a love/hate relationship. Those are always powerful

[trainwreck]

Thank you! I feel so out of practice, I'm glad to know that you were impacted. :)

[Bridget Mcmaken]

the rhythm of the poem was great. The poem has a wonderful flow to it and was much easy to understand the point of the poem. It's a wonderful poem that you have written well. I love it! great job!

[trainwreck]

Thank you so much! I'm glad that it was understandable.

[trainwreck]

Thank you!

[Bridget Mcmaken]

you are very much welcome!