summer dreams

summer dreams

A Poem by heartlessRah
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all writtings i put up is written by someone special

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Waking up next to that special someone puts you in a good mood. Cant help but wait till you can see them when you get home. Their smile brightens the gloomy days. Everytime you think of them you are taken off to that fairy tale. Thinking he can be the one who sweeps you off your feet. The long summer days turn into long summer nights with your head on his chest snuggled close in the tall long green grass. The stars shining down on you they seeem to be telling you all your secrets are safe no one is going to know. The aroma of the grass comforts you making your eyes get heavy and the warmth of your bodies close together pulls you into dream land.

© 2010 heartlessRah


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Use capitals in the beginning of a sentence, punctuations in proper place and don't cut-off words ('u', 'r'). Errors - 'ad' (and), 'Thinking he can be the one' (Thinking he could be the one), 'seeem' (seem).

I really don't get why you made so many mistakes in such a small piece. Were you ignorant? Other than the mistakes, it was a nice and comfy piece of work :)

Keep writing.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Use capitals in the beginning of a sentence, punctuations in proper place and don't cut-off words ('u', 'r'). Errors - 'ad' (and), 'Thinking he can be the one' (Thinking he could be the one), 'seeem' (seem).

I really don't get why you made so many mistakes in such a small piece. Were you ignorant? Other than the mistakes, it was a nice and comfy piece of work :)

Keep writing.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on July 11, 2010
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