I Am Human

I am not perfect...

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I am human in this big world
I might be warm, I might be cold
Sometimes I'm weak I need to hold
A heart of gold, a heart of gold

If I'm afraid I wear a hood
I don't do all the things I could
Sometimes I feel to hide my mood
I'm not so good, I'm not so good

In my weakness, I still feel strong
I find my voice and sing my song
Though I don't know where I belong
This can't be wrong, this can't be wrong

When I am strong, I never boast
Though triumphs need a simple toast
Like ship that sails into the coast
Back to my post, back to my post

I am human, I tell this straight
Sometimes I see you fill my plate
I would get mad, I also hate
I am not great, I am not great

I cannot see myself somehow
How I will smile a year from now
But I believe God will allow
I take a bow, I take a bow

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Author's Note

A Monotetra I wrote at 5am on 10/26/2015, first day of our In-Service Training.

Reviews

[NeiL ArandA]

The personality of the muse that was described by the author or writer is somewhat intriguing. To err is still human. To overestimate ourselves and have a condescending disposition is somewhat abrasive. The muse chose the humbling or less than assertive mood and position. To say that we are only human is putting limitations on the spirit of human resiliency and resolute faith and the power of the One that created it to move and have its being thus selling ourselves short of what we are really worth. I do like the last line which the muse refocus that she is not by herself and there's a Higher Power that is capable of equipping anyone and empower her to succeed in life. The muse had a change of heart from acknowledging that she can't to can, to be a victim of her own circumstances to a victor. To believe that even simple or ordinary people can be used and empowered by God to do extraordinary things.

The pattern and rhyme scheme of the poem is smooth and there's a fluidity. Repeating the last line of each stanza creates a reflective atmosphere to pause and contemplate upon the thought. Very well penned Dhaye !

[Dhaye]

Thank you for reading and your insight, Neil.

[abderrahmane dakir]

It's a nice poem which express the feeling of human being in all cases. Thank you for sharing.

[Willard Wells]

Recognizing we have faults and weakness along with other faults is what makes us who we are. It can also makes a stronger.

Nice work on frailties and yet still waiting for the future to unfold. God likes to surprise us.

[Dhaye]

Thanks for the kind words and sharing your insights, sir.

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

I like this poem. It is open and unpretentious. I like the last stanza where the mood and thoughts come together.

[Dhaye]

Thanks, Val.

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

My pleasure Hollywood.

[Dhaye]

Hollywood. Lol.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Your content of the whole spectrum in this write...was presented and I see that you wrote this at 5am...as if this is being said aloud in the format for which you put forth the lines...but the "I's" disrupted my reading a bit...if this is a fresh piece...just depletion of some would help this work...and give the send-off IMPO...unless that's the theme in a Monotetra...then by all means I do not want to take away for the strict form...

[Dhaye]

I's is impossible in a poem written in third person point of view...this is first person. Lol. Silly me.Thanks for reading, Glen.

[gabrielle]

The meticulous structure/form is impressive, Dhaye. The substance and/or the thought of the poem is something i also believe in. No one is perfect. Humans are designed to feel both positive and negative emotions as such we cannot truly claim that we are incapable of hate, of envy, of anger. I do like this piece. It presented so simply yet so deeply what it means to be human. :)

[Dhaye]

Thank you, Gab. Monotetra is one of my favorite forms of poetry. It's like a song to me because of the repeated phrase of the last line of each verse.

[Eddie Davis]

Nicely done, the repeating line at the end of each stanza gives the poem an almost musical flow to it. The poem shows the struggle of everyday people and is well expressed.

[Dhaye]

Thank you, Eddie. I really love Monotetra because of that reason- it sounds like music due to the repetition at the last line of each verse.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poem. True and honest thoughts my friend.
"I am human, I tell this straight
Sometimes I see you fill my plate
I would get mad, I also hate
I am not great, I am not great "
No perfect people. Just us doing our best. Thank you Dhaye for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Dhaye]

Thank you, CP.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.