THERE WAS A STORY

of them

There was a story that I once told
Nobody believed me, felt they were so cold
I was hopeless to see a heart made of gold
Who could understand my story ten times fold

There was a woman who smiles in everything
In every moment, every situation that it brings
She was there hiding behind the mask while she sings
Nobody knows her tears, she's holding on to her last string

There was a story that I once cried with you
Now it was just a story to recall when I want to
Seeing us together, strong and faithful as we grow
There was a story, now I can't recall but you.

Author's Note

Random writing...

Reviews

[NeiL ArandA]

It maybe better Dhaye if your first opening line is presented this way . There was or There's a story that I was once told ". I think it softens the descent .
" There was or there's a story that I once cried with you " may sounds more fluid by not repeating or using the word. ' one ' twice . But its totally up to you . Just minor tweak.

The story is probably about a friendship gone awry or never stood the test of time . And the muse still feeling the aches and stings of a once one bloosoming and vibrant love. By some stroke of circumstance the relationship suddenly ended. The muse seems to still reminisce and clings to the past and hopes to reversed the irreversable . I felt the pulsating longing and gnawing feeling of the muse . I noticed that the author maybe following a strict meter . Splendid write Dhaye . Keep climbing .

[Dhaye]

Thank you, Neil. Suggestions taken. I will edit this poem when I am with my laptop, but now I am viewing this through cp and can only comment.

It's not real friendship if it didn't stand the test of time. What I have now is really a blessing from God. And I will do my best to protect it.

The meaning the poem depends on the readers interpretation.
Thank you again.

[Dhaye]

*meaning of the poem

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the story in the poetry. All of us have stories to tell. Some to remind us who we are. Thank you dear Poet for sharing your outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Dhaye]

Thank you, CP for the read and comment.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[W R Stowe]

Yes there are many stories behind the surface of ones exterior emotions and you did well displaying this story nice to see you back

Bill

[Dhaye]

Thanks.
Maybe back for a while to some old stuffs

[Dhaye]

to copy some old stuffs

[W R Stowe]

I have been busy working and haven't wrote much lately but the season is coming to an end

[Rachelle]

Now to set these lyrics into a melody, Dhaye......

[Dhaye]

Thanks, Rachelle. Welcome back to us. :)

[Eddie Davis]

Wonderfully done, with a positive ending.

[Dhaye]

Thank you so much, Eddie.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

when endings turn out to be beginnings, the memory of the pain fades....when beginnings become endings, the pain is recalled with higher clarity than the definition on an HD Television...

j.

[Dhaye]

Thanks a lot, sir J.

[gabrielle]

Interesting piece. It makes me wonder what's the whole story is about.

[Dhaye]

Just about someone who recovered from a bad experience.
Thanks a lot, Gab.

[gabrielle]

Always my pleasure, dhaye :)