LOVE ME AGAIN   (Rondeau)

LOVE ME AGAIN (Rondeau)

A Chapter by Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)
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A collaboration with Aethereal

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Love me again, I'll give my everything
Give me your heart, and I’ll take the love you bring
We’ll set the world where we don’t see the past
We’ll sail the sea with our love’s stronger mast--
We’ll feel the breeze like the songs of love we sing.

So love me, dear, and let our heartstrings cling
Through all our Winters, Summers, and Springs
So take my hand, you’re mine again at last!
Love me again...

We’ll be as two doves flying wing to wing
To our celestial throne as queen and king
Where soft angelic clouds may off-broadcast
A love that's deeper than the stars, so vast
As vibrant harp strings mimic each heartstring
Love me again...









© 2023 Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)


Author's Note

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)
Rondeau

A Rondeau is a French form, 15 lines long, consisting of three stanzas: a quintet, a quatrain, and a sestet with a rhyme scheme as follows: aabba aabR aabbaR. Lines 9 and 15 are short - a refrain (R) consisting of a phrase taken from line one. The other lines are longer (but all of the same metrical length).


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Intriguing love poem! “Past” and “last” don’t rhyme with “dust“, “must“, and “lust“. The word “song” should be “songs” in line five. Line four is hard to understand.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aethereal

10 Years Ago

You still haven’t followed 0/1/0/1/0/1/0/10/1 ten syllable meter in your last two verses. You may .. read more
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Aethereal

10 Years Ago

This would be perfect if you added a sixth line to the last verse such as "a love much deeper than t.. read more



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It's really beautifull the flow is really god

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

10 Years Ago

Thanks a lot, Rose.
Intriguing love poem! “Past” and “last” don’t rhyme with “dust“, “must“, and “lust“. The word “song” should be “songs” in line five. Line four is hard to understand.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aethereal

10 Years Ago

You still haven’t followed 0/1/0/1/0/1/0/10/1 ten syllable meter in your last two verses. You may .. read more
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Aethereal

10 Years Ago

This would be perfect if you added a sixth line to the last verse such as "a love much deeper than t.. read more
A well executed piece of work (with music and picture.) 'No other feelings but the love we bring.' Well done.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

10 Years Ago

Thanks, GAA.
Beautifully romantic! You've outdone yourself with this one, Daisie! Thank you for sharing!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

10 Years Ago

Thanks, Michael. Rondeau is such a nice poetry form especially if you have chosen an effective refr.. read more
Oh so very romantic writing, I am mesmerized by your divine verses.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

10 Years Ago

Thank you!
I am learning from you everyday, Sis!


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

10 Years Ago

Glad you learned something from my page. Thanks for the read, sis. =)
This poem is so sweet, I love it. :-) :-)

Kaze~

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

10 Years Ago

Thank you, K. I'll go back to your page soon. =)
♔ CrownedDevil ☾

10 Years Ago

Your very welcome. :-)
Once again, a nice learning experience, thank you, Dhaye.

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Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

10 Years Ago

I'm the one who should thank you a lot. =)
Eddie Davis

10 Years Ago

Not at all, you have taught me the mechanics of poems, which is something we really didn't learn ver.. read more
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

10 Years Ago

Ah, yes. In my Literature subject, we just studied about the life of the poet, the brief history and.. read more
My favorite love poem is Neruda's Sonnet XVII and the last line of this poem somehow reflects the concept in there. Thank you for sharing =)

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

10 Years Ago

Ma-research nga yung sinasabi mong poem. Hehe.

That's my first attempt in writing a Ron.. read more
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

10 Years Ago

I've read it. Modern sonnet pala sya. Ganda. =)

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