LET’S DANCE IN THE RAIN (Pantoum)

Hope I won't fail in this form.

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My love, let us dance in the rain

Let it wash our tears away

Heal our wounds and clean our stain

Make us feel better today

 

Let it wash our tears away

Let it help us forget our sorrow

Make us feel better today

Forget yesterday and think of tomorrow

 

Let it help us forget our sorrow

Every storm will surely end

Forget yesterday and think of tomorrow

Feel the raindrops that really mend

 

Every storm will surely end

The pain, the hurt, we’ll soon forget

Feel the raindrops that really mend

Just remember the goals we set

 

The pain, the hurt, we’ll soon forget

Heal our wounds and clean our stain

Just remember the goals we set

My love, let’s us dance in the rain.

Author's Note

Pantoum

The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.

The design is simple:

Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4

Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8

Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanzathen repeats the second and fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first line of the poem is also the last.

Last stanza:

Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza


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Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and hopeful poem. Good to dance in the warm rain. The poem had story and create good vision. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dhaye]

Thanks, CP.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Very nice write, Daisie! I love the pairing with the song. Perfection!

[Dhaye]

Thank you so much! Glad you like this one.

[Aethereal]

This is beautiful and it seems to be in good form. I was inspire to write my own Pantoum which I'll be placing on my site in a few hours. It's called Dolphin Love.

[Dhaye]

Hmnn...I'll see why it is called Dolphin Love. Glad you were inspired to write your own version.
read moreHmnn...I'll see why it is called Dolphin Love. Glad you were inspired to write your own version.
Thanks for visiting my page, Ae.

[Aethereal]

Your welcome! I'm going to get it on my site within the next ten minutes. Standby!

[Aethereal]

The poem is on my site now! I had to find a dolphin picture for it.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Beautiful, for the rain washes the soul clean and refreshes the spirit... to dance in this cloudburst with the one you love is such an enchanting reverie. Gorgeously penned...

[Dhaye]

Thanks a lot, Kalypso. =)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

That is so wonderful, so uplifting, love can conquer all with a little patience, again not familiar with the form but I love the poem

[Dhaye]

Thanks, cowboy. =)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are welcome hon.

[Rachelle]

Absolution and renewal…..
Beautifully done, Sis!

[Dhaye]

Thanks so much, sis. Mwaah! =)

[Rachelle]

Mwaaahhh back to you!!! Beso-beso!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very well done...you held to the form and produced a very romantic piece.

[Dhaye]

Thanks a lot, Sir Jacob. =)

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

OMG, I'm lost for words. :-)

Kaze~ :-) :-D

[Dhaye]

Glad you still have few words said. LOL. Thanks so much, K.

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)

[Eddie Davis]

This seems very advanced, but as usual, very fascinating.

[Dhaye]

Believe me, it's included in the Traditional Poetry Forms. We are not just aware and familiar of it.
Thanks again, Eddie. I owe you a lot today.

[Eddie Davis]

You are welcome, thanks for expanding my limited hillbilly knowledge.