KEEP ME

Inspired by the photo and the song

Keep me in your eyes like a beautiful flower
Delicate and soft that needs a love so tender

Keep me in your arms like a fluffy pillow
Touch my supple skin 'til the depths of my marrow

Kiss me longer, dear, I want to feel your lips
While your strands play with my silky fingertips

Keep me in your heart and love me forever
Would you paint my picture and write my name in there?

Keep me in your life, I am yours, take me whole
Keep me forever falling, take my body and soul...

Author's Note

Anaphora
Repetition of the same word or phrase at the beginning of successive clauses or verses.

Reviews

[Bright Ocean Star]

This is beautiful, tender, and incredibly romantic. Very good, Dhaye. I don't like most romantic poetry, because most people overdo it and it gets sickly sweet quick, but you did an incredible job with this one. It is a pleasure to read your 'mind'. Thank you for sharing it.

[Dhaye]

Wow! Your words are really encouraging, Anne. You know, I always worry if I post something like this...if it will sound overly seductive or erotica...but my first readers said it wasn't. Thank you so much!

[Tate Morgan]

The eternal need for love is what drives us all

[Dhaye]

Thanks, Tate.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the hope for forever in the poem. The amazing description gave life to hope and love. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Dhaye]

Thanks, CP. =)

[Deuces]

Submission in its simplest form. A beautiful letter professing love and surrendering to it. Very nice piece.

[Dhaye]

Thank you, GVC.

[MsJewel]

I love romantic poetry and this is stunning.. So many beautiful lines worth remembering. Going in my library.

:) Julie

[Dhaye]

Thank you so much, Ms. J.

[Sami Khalil]

"Kiss me longer, dear, I want to feel your lips
While your strands play with my silky fingertips

Keep me in your heart and love me forever"

I feel the depth of the narrator is calling her beloved to be tender and mellow in his approach to her love and be appreciative to the depth of her beauty. Forever falling is the forever keeping...Excellent romance...:)........

[Dhaye]

Thank you fro dropping by, Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..................

[Pax]

simplicity in love, makes most endearing to read... That's what I see in this piece. It gives your reader a fluffy feeling of love and devotion towards their love ones... Very nice piece pretty friend.

[Dhaye]

Thank you so much, Pax. Glad this sounds simple to you. Now, I know how to make sweet pieces and not that seductive. =)

[Pax]

bakit may piece ka bang seductive, show me...

[Dhaye]

Anjan sa profile page...The title is I Am Yours...can you assess it if it's really seductive/mature?

[Pax]

wait... let me see....

[Glen Yumang Manese]

As with the song...I see how this was inspired...
has the flow and depth of a song...
the repeating chorus...
the reader is drawn in...
and simplicity with the words...

[Dhaye]

Thank you so much, Glen. I hope this one is just romantic and not overly seductive that I have to rate it mature. LOL

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I do not believe so...if there is profanity --- sexual relate --- vulgar in tone --- semi/nude pictures...and stuff like that...than I can see...too tame...hehehe

[Dhaye]

LOL. Thanks. At least there's no feeling of guilt because some friends don't like mature pieces in my page. Best wishes!

[Dhaye]

*on my page...

[Glen Yumang Manese]

We have to grow up sometime...hehehe...there's no holding that back...understandable...society is changing with the times...but there will always be the misfits...that do...and equality rings through...if its Mature...just mark and be on your way...