And who will say that this I was the guy here who seemed like a lost soul for two years?
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Love...I can't explain why it controls all our senses. Our minds. Our hearts. I don't really understand how I came to certain decisions in my life, like now...
Upon seeing the same baby girl I have seen yesterday in this same spot, perhaps it's about that little joy I felt when I first saw her, I walked nearer until I find myself sitting at her front to stare at her. Yes, I just stare at her. She's like an angel and I don't know why I have such feeling.
"Hey, baby girl. Come on," a voice I heard which came from a woman.
I stood and smiled at her. "She's cute," the words slipped from my mouth.
"Thank you. We have to go," she said.
"Come on, baby. Your mom is waiting for you," she said while holding the baby and trying to carry her.
"Wait! She's not your child, is she?" I asked the woman while following them.
She frowned. "No, but why do you ask? Sorry, we have to go."
I remain standing until I can't see them before my eyes.
I am a little confused. The woman says "Come on, baby. Your mom is waiting for you," and the man asks "Wait! Isn't she your child?" to which the woman replies "Yes, but why are you asking? "
Am I missing something? The woman tells the child that Mom is waiting, yet confirms for the man that "Yes" the child is hers.
To make this plausible the man"s question should be something like "Wait, she is not your child?" to which the woman could say "No she isn't but why do you ask?"
Or am i missing something totally?
That is possible. : )
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thanks for pointing out that confusing line, Noel. I have to rephrase it to be make it clear that th.. read moreThanks for pointing out that confusing line, Noel. I have to rephrase it to be make it clear that the woman is not really the child's mother though she calls her 'mommy'. Thanks again.
Mmmm...probably in the end he'll find out that the little girl is his...
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Hehe. Kaya di ko na maituloy ito, parang matatapos agad. Kasi nga, ang iiksi na ng chapter, naisulat.. read moreHehe. Kaya di ko na maituloy ito, parang matatapos agad. Kasi nga, ang iiksi na ng chapter, naisulat ko na agad yung about sa baby. Isip muna ako ng conflicts para dumami pa ang chapters. Short story lang kasi dati ito eh...buti na lang may nakilala akong tumutulong. Give and take naman kami. Tinutulungan ko rin kaya nagbabasa na ako now ng stories and books. LOL
Thanks, Gab.
I am a little confused. The woman says "Come on, baby. Your mom is waiting for you," and the man asks "Wait! Isn't she your child?" to which the woman replies "Yes, but why are you asking? "
Am I missing something? The woman tells the child that Mom is waiting, yet confirms for the man that "Yes" the child is hers.
To make this plausible the man"s question should be something like "Wait, she is not your child?" to which the woman could say "No she isn't but why do you ask?"
Or am i missing something totally?
That is possible. : )
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thanks for pointing out that confusing line, Noel. I have to rephrase it to be make it clear that th.. read moreThanks for pointing out that confusing line, Noel. I have to rephrase it to be make it clear that the woman is not really the child's mother though she calls her 'mommy'. Thanks again.
Thank you, AA...but I think I can add two or three short chapters only because I'm really busy nowad.. read moreThank you, AA...but I think I can add two or three short chapters only because I'm really busy nowadays. Anyway, this is only one of the three short novels that I want to compile in one book. Thank you again.
10 Years Ago
What I enjoy the most was the feeling of being in love and the way you played emotions, truly connec.. read moreWhat I enjoy the most was the feeling of being in love and the way you played emotions, truly connected with readers. Keep writing you're very good and always a pleasure my friend.
Hello! I am Dhaye, a public secondary school teacher, a passionate artist "married" to her dream.
I write in different perspectives. So please know NOT all my works are about me.
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